The Immoral Lies (Very short)

[misterreplicant]

I just came up with it in an instant:

And there, beheld in front of my eyes,
Over one million, immoral lies.
Each one used for personal gain,
Each user will soon be brought pain.

[hillwalker]

I just came up with it in an instant:

Never a good selling point when trying to attract a readership - it suggests it is hardly worthy a first glance let alone a second. And why advertise the poem's 'short'comings in the title???

This poem might have had some redeeming features without the prologue and parenthetical title, but all was destroyed in that final line. It's a clumsy attempt to keep the rhyme intact and trips over itself in the process.

h

[misterreplicant]

Thank you, I will keep this in mind next time I post.
This topic has become obsolete to me, it can be deleted.