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Jerrybaldy
01-22-2011, 09:26 PM
Blind Bob, the resident,
piss poor piano player
belted out a Wednesday night version
of ' Georgia on my mind'.
I sucked on the skeleton
of a camel
and pictured Amy,
the barmaid, undressed.
Dancing Nigel
dropped his trousers
and swung in all directions.
Arthur joined me with one leg
and told me when he
would lose the next.
Bob slipped into
'American trilogy'
and the now naked Nigel
curled his lip and flipped his dick.
I grabbed lilly
with her pickled onion breath
and danced to Elvis
and her widowhood.
Charlie got three cherries
and bought the house
more rum.
I left to walk by the river
to follow it home to bed.
I dreamt I danced with Amy
and we followed the water,
to someplace else,
instead.

hillwalker
01-23-2011, 07:17 AM
A gently humorous picture of frittering away a midweek night with wine, women and song.

I particularly loved the lines 'I sucked on the skeleton/of a camel'

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Haunted
01-26-2011, 08:30 PM
Billy Joel's Piano Man started playing in my head on the second line but then it takes a different and original path like the rest of your stuff. As usual I marvel at the cast of your characters. I wonder where that someplace else is...

qimissung
01-27-2011, 12:37 AM
lol, me too. Sounds like a rousing night at the local pub, mate!

PrinceMyshkin
01-27-2011, 09:03 AM
I couldn't make head nor tail of


and danced to Elvis
and her widowhood.


but had a romp with the rest of this.

everyadventure
01-27-2011, 11:08 PM
It takes talent to bring characters to life with only a line... but you've done it.

kittypaws
01-27-2011, 11:20 PM
I understand it! It was Wednesday ~ hump day as it is called...anything goes!

I am just glad you did not fall into the water with Amy but then again that could spark another post of Amy with her sheer blouse clinging to her breast and tight pants and kissable lips.

You know...you never mentioned her lips!

Nigel....now he is a character!

Thank you Jerry for the smiles this brought!
Kudos!!

Kittypaws

firefangled
01-27-2011, 11:33 PM
Reminiscent of Bukowski, I think.

Interesting how three words in the 7th line kept the rest of the poem from sounding over the top.

Very imaginative characters.