Trust

[jajdude]

Fall backward blindly
Against your racing fear
That it may hurt a lot
Because I may not be there

And as you fall exhilarated
By your abandonment of fear
You will nearly hit the ground
And I will catch you there

(1993)

[Jack of Hearts]

Disclaimer: this reader does not fundamentally understand poetry.

That aside, he likes this for its simpleness, its clearness and its focus.





J

[Delta40]

I really feel there should be something between the two verses. I think the journey of falling back blindly in fear to the exhilarating abandonment would be an interesting read. I can't help but feel you have given me a beginning, an end and omitted the middle.

[hillwalker]

This reminds me of a management training exercise I once took part in - falling backwards off a step-ladder into the arms of some fellow-trainees. Trust-building.

It's rather simple, bare-bones poetry. But at least it triggered a response.

H

[jajdude]

Thanks for your replies. It is a simple poem. I wrote it many years ago along with many others I do not recall the words for. I really wouldn't know how to change it much, add lines or whatever, to improve it, since I kind of like it the way it is. If anyone has an idea for that, be my guest.