How It Comes and Goes

[Jack of Hearts]

Funny how it comes and goes;
the love, good times and then the writing.
Ourselves, canyons of reddened glows
and through us flows a river winding.

Rapid love, break the rocks
and smiles, may we drift in plenty
and flood our paper with our pen,
bring the words to taste of sweetest honey.

But funny, how it comes and goes...
You and I agree on that
up all night dealin' cards
and flickin' played ones at a hat.

[anzki4]

Funny how this poem is so good :) It was easy to read the poem, and it goes on with a good flow. Also, nice subject. Overall; very good one. Keep up the good work. (Which of I am pretty sure you do...)

[hillwalker]

A gently poignant poem about reflecting on life.....

But the rhyme was a little awkward in the first verse - that phrase

'canyons of reddened glows' not quite working for me here.

And the rhythm is abandoned in verse 2 - perhaps intentionally - but again the opening two lines are difficult to get to grips with

should it be 'breaks' rather than 'break'? and are you saying 'rapid love.... smiles' or 'rapid love break(s) the.... smiles'?

A work in progress perhaps rather than the finished article

H

[Jerrybaldy]

Melodic and songlike, Jack and with a sweet resignation.
cheers
Jerry

[Delta40]

I like the final verse the best as if totally accepting