Lunacy

[Dark Muse]

Lunacy

Poised upon the ledge
precariously balanced
on perfections edge.

How fragile the fissures
of the mind, straddling
fault lines, only a doll
with cracking skin.

When the precipice
yawns below,
where darkness awaits
the fall of a girl
who wants it all.

A frigid purity
which cannot bend
don't blame the moon
when the night begins to call,
and draws from the depths
within.

The lines of reality
begin to blur
when she starts to
see the demon inside
and it begins to claw
to the surface, breaking skin.

Dreams and nightmares
merge, her reflections
begin to laugh
the voices whisper in her head,
her legs start to give way.

How much longer
can she hold her
perfected angelic beauty
as the shadow encroaches
and panic sets in,
her heart about to break
like glass.

Don't blame the moon
when her cold light
opens her arms
to embrace the girl
cast out from the light.

The fault lines
of her mind began to
crack beneath the pressure
as she felt the world's
weight bear upon her.

Everything at her fingertips
just within reach
far beyond her grasp,
she lived trapped within her own
grotesque fantasy,
a ballerina in a music box
forever spinning around,

Until the moment......

shards of broken glass
reflecting slivers of realty.

[MystyrMystyry]

Dark Muse, You're my favorite poet

[Dark Muse]

Thank you very much!

[hillwalker]

Some great imagery here - the fragility of someone held up as an example of perfection but failing to live up to the hype?

There's a little repetition - including fault lines x 2 (the fault lines of the mind rather weakened by an earlier appearance between her feet).

With a little tightening up this could be so much better. But your poetry never fails to fascinate.

H

[YesNo]

I take it the demon finally broke through the skin and her heart broke like glass at the end. Is it worse with the demon out or better? Interesting ideas of perfection and beauty fearful that everything will shatter and fall.

[weltanschauung]

"living on a razor's edge
balancing on the ledge.."

[Dark Muse]

Thank you! This poem was in part inspired by the movie The Black Swan, the basic idea behind it is the idea of someone who has been sheltered, that it is as if they were a living doll held up to this image of angelic perfection, so when they do come to the realization of their darker side, it starts a conflict within them because the two sides are split right down the middle into these opposing polar forces.

[dyne7]

The Black Swan was a very good movie, and this is an engrossing write. Maybe tighten up some of the lines a bit, employ some word economy. "Don't blame the moon" was a great line.

[Dark Muse]

The Black Swan was a very good movie, and this is an engrossing write. Maybe tighten up some of the lines a bit, employ some word economy. "Don't blame the moon" was a great line.

Thank you!