Shattered Family

[Delta40]

World fall apart
Mum, Dad, other man
Hearts plummet
in unision
smashing to the floor
English pottery
with no value
Tissue winding
Knotted tummy
Man tears
extinguish hope
she leaves Dad
for the other man
Little girl to the rescue
Knobbly knees
Tiny hands
soothe a
sorrow-filled Dad
in the empty hallway
Her strength greater
more powerful than
towering wreck.
He pancakes like
the twin towers.
Her loyal utterances
quell daunting fears
Finds a chip of
his heart
Sticks it back
with snot kisses
He weeps and howls
like an injured dog
Mission Impossible
Her happiness sacrificed
Her childhood lost
for him
Get back on feet
He never looks back
Little girl of
abundant love
in the hallway
shattered
alone

[hillwalker]

The staccatto language used here is very much like some kind of fractured nursery rhyme - intentionally so I'm assuming to convey the situation from the little girl's viewpoint.
And yet much of the imagery is drawn with a more cynical eye than that of a child. Powerful as ever.

H

[PrinceMyshkin]

I felt that

He pancakes like
the twin towers.

was an alienating intrusion on what I was reading as an intimate, private account, albeit one that had something of a universal application. But I didn't feel very much of this and didn't believe that you'd given your heart to the writing of it.

[Delta40]

You could be right Prince. I did not write that originally and only added it as an afterthought thinking that it might help people understand.

[dyne7]

what a fantastic poem. i enjoy the stream of consciousness employed here and it's very realistic. it's a raw and gritty write that is completely plausible.