What is seen?

[ShadowFire]

What is seen?
What do you see?
What,
Do you see, dear flower?
When you look out,
What do you see?

You see a mountain range
You see a flowing river
You see a vast forest
You see a starry sky

But that is not what I see
When I look out,
Let me say what I see

I see a mountain
That reaches for the heavens.
The heavens it will never touch

I see a single drop of water
Lost and confused
Not knowing where it came,
Nor where it is going.

I see a dying leaf
Alone, clinging to a branch
Dried and worthless

I see a sad star
Who tries to shine
As bright as the moon
But will never be close enough

That,
That is what I see
But that is not all,
I see so much more.
I will tell you,
If you, please, will listen
Please dear flower

I see a mighty mountain
Strong, looking over all the land
Ready to lead others
Ready to give direction

I see a precious drop
That is the difference between
A man dying of thirst's tear
And the sip to save his life

I see a valuable leaf
One to become a traveler's bed
Though death whispers
To that traveler that leaf brings life

I see a struggling star
Yet it does not need to
With the strength of others
When the moon sleeps
It will shine forever bright

Dear flower,
That is what I see.
I tell you what I see out there
So in this world of despair
It is not as dark.
May you find direction in life
Worthy to shine in night

Thank you and Good night,
Dear flower.

[yuka]

well, so powerful
impressed deep by your voice and your spirit

[weltanschauung]

behind the horizon lies the mouth of the void, waiting for a snack.

[Amylian]

A very strong and coherent imagery. The use of Apostrophe is what I liked most in thine poem and the repetitions as well.

[hillwalker]

I also found the use of dialogue towards a flower presented an original view of the universe as seen through the narrator's eyes.

I might have been tempted to cut verse 7 right down to the bone in order to maintain the flow between what was written before and what follows. As the verse stands it creates a rather distracting break.

But overall a very enjoyable poem.

H

[dyne7]

it's an impressive write certaintly, although i was confused my the mental cognition of the speaker, and didn't know how panoramic his/her focus was.