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hillwalker
12-22-2010, 10:21 AM
Part 1 (sorry - it's a long one.....)

SWEETPEA

I’m getting better. Everybody here tells me I am so it must be true; the facilitators in my therapy group, the nurses who keep the wards ticking over and dole out our meds, the orderlies who provide day to day support and most importantly Doctor Andrews. He told me so seven or eight months earlier when he went through my case notes with me and Miss Russell, my case worker.
“It’s such a big step, Michael, taking responsibility at last for your own actions. Now you need to start thinking about what happens when you get out of here.”
It wasn’t something that I had seriously given any consideration to over the past fourteen years. When Miss Russell (“call me Jo”) had taken me under her wing less than a year ago she had made it clear that if I was to function again in the outside world I needed a robust support network. She would be its cornerstone.
“Your life is going to get better, Michael. Trust me.”
That was easier said than done.
It was nerve-wracking just standing underneath the awning outside the main reception area where I was now allowed to take my cigarette breaks. The throb of heavy traffic beyond the gates leading into Dee Meadows seemed to go on without pause. And the gawping faces of those who actually passed by on foot did not augur well for the future.
Jo had started coming outside with me on my breaks when she was visiting; often bringing in an ounce or two of ‘burn’ and even helping in her own little way by rolling me a couple of ciggies while I savoured my smoke. No matter what dosage they put me on, my hands never lost the shakes.
“You’re going to notice things moving a lot faster than when you were last out and about. More traffic on the streets….. everybody always on the go….. kids with mobile phones clamped to their ears or iPod wires sticking out of their heads…..”
I had figured out most of the changes for myself from watching TV and thumbing through the magazines the orderlies brought in for us. I thought of my niece, Lucy. Eight and a half the last time I’d seen her. Coming up to twenty-five soon; probably the same age as Jo here. I couldn’t begin to imagine the changes her life had gone through. We could pass each other in the street and not even recognise each other. She might have a stud in her belly button and her hair streaked, or perhaps cut short and spiked with gel like a boy’s. She might even have children of her own. I would never know since I was no longer part of her life.
“Are you cool about next Monday?”
I was scheduled an afternoon’s supervised trip into town. Gordon would drive us there in the mini-bus on his way to the day-care centre out at Marchmount House. I would be dropped off by the station, and be taken around the shops by Jo. Boots and W H Smiths were still there, so she reckoned. The bank, the florist’s I used to call at on the corner, and the town library. The old Plaza cinema had shut down – a ‘theme pub’ now, whatever one of those is.
“Don’t worry, Michael. We can stop off somewhere quiet for a coffee if you don’t feel up to doing much window shopping.”
I mashed out my cigarette on the lid of my tin then crumbled the stub between my fingers in order to salvage the few surviving flakes of scorched tobacco.
“Somewhere quiet?”
“Yes. If you’d rather. I’ll be there with you, remember. Everything’s going to be fine.”
Even now, sixteen years after it all happened, once the lights were dimmed and the nurses had closed up the side wards I still took my little box out of the locker. I usually held it under my green over-blanket and drifted off to sleep soon after with its shape cradled in my arms. If H or Ziggy found it there when they roused me in the morning they just put it back where it belonged, right at the bottom under my rolled up winter jumpers and corduroy jacket.
“Come on, Mike, my man. Let’s put that somewhere safe and get you showered and shaved.”
I could shower myself in a fashion despite the shakes, but it was still normal procedure for one of the orderlies to stay close by whenever I was entrusted with something as lethal as a disposable razor. It was something I had got accustomed to. It was as normal as queuing to collect the week’s supply of toilet roll, shampoo and toothpaste every Saturday afternoon. Most of the young lads went through a tube of toothpaste a week in here since drawing pins were not allowed.

- - - - -

“First stop Station Road.”
I sat in the seat directly behind Gordon. I’d done this journey perhaps a dozen times in the last five years but never been allowed to get off in the town centre until today.
“We’ll be back here at four,” Jo told him as the door swung open. “If there’s any change of plan I’ll ring Brian on his mobile.”
Brian was normally to be found huddled at the back of the mini-bus like an unclaimed piece of luggage.
“Grab hold of my hand. Everything’s going to be ok.”
I traipsed alongside her like a primary school kid on an outing. I felt that everybody’s eyes were on me, although it was more likely that Jo was the main attraction. She looked as smart as ever in a pair of tight navy leggings beneath a short plaid skirt, a black jacket with a fur-trimmed collar and a knitted hat pulled all the way down to cover her black hair. Her woollen glove was warm and reassuring to the touch.
There seemed to be new stores sprouting everywhere. She took me past the Argos superstore on the site of the old BRS yard, the Starbucks where the ‘Trooper’ had once stood and a Next shop where ‘Jenkins the Stationers’ had once been. Then we crossed over the road at the pedestrian lights so we could keep to the sunny side of Cripplesgate.
“Do you remember any of this?”
I nodded. Dazed and enthralled at the same time. Of course I did. We passed a glass and chrome monstrosity that turned out to be an internet cafe and before I realised it we were turning left down Bridge Street. I felt my feet grow leaden.
“D’you want to go through the archway under the clock, Michael? Walk down towards the canal?”
I nodded gratefully. Less people that end of town. Less faces that might recognise mine. It was already getting harder to draw breath. I still felt everybody’s eyes fixed on us as Jo led me past the shops and offices and restaurants I had once known so well.

‘Mama Mia’ on Bridge Street had not been open very long. I had been in there one lunch time with some of the gang from work. It seemed a lively place, with a friendly atmosphere. The food was your basic Italian but not overly expensive. When I finally plucked up the courage to ask Polly out for a glass or two of vino after work it seemed like the ideal place. She had spent the last three hours checking the departmental budget forecasts with me so I felt we both deserved a couple of drinks.
“Blimey, is that the time? No wonder the place is empty. Hey, listen, do you like Italian food?”
“Mm, yeh. Why?”
“I thought we could grab a bite to eat at that new place in Bridge Street, unless you’ve got something else planned.”
“Well, I had promised myself it was time I defrosted my freezer. But I suppose that can wait.”
Just a couple of glasses of the house red and a tuna salad but already I felt relaxed enough to confide in Polly about how I felt about work in general and her position in particular. I normally allowed office politics to pass over my head, but I had noticed a definite atmosphere since she had moved from Telesales into Accounts.
“I suppose they see me as a threat,” she laughed. “I’d rather get stuck in with my work than spend half the day on the phone to the latest boyfriend and the rest of it chatting about shoes or diets. I suppose because I’m older than most of the girls they think I’m a bit of a bore, but I just like doing a good job you know.”
“Polly, this isn’t a job interview. I’ve been keeping an eye on you for a few weeks now. You don’t need to tell me how hard you work. That isn’t why I wanted to have this chat.”
“So why did you bring me here?”
“Well, to say thanks for today. And to figure out whether we can see more of each other. Outside work.”
A shy smile crossed her face as she nodded to herself.
“Mm. I’ve had my eye on you as well, but I assumed you were married. I’d sussed out that you weren’t gay but you never seem to flirt like the rest of the lads in Advertising or Sales do. I just had you down as a happy, family man.”
“No such luck. Engaged to the job and that’s about it. So what about you? Any current boyfriend?”
Polly shook her head.
“Not for the last year or so. My love life’s a long story, Michael. Bit of a horror story to be honest with you.”
And during the following three months I got to know her story, and she mine. Up to a point.
By then we had become regular diners in the ‘Wheatsheaf’ on Ferry Lane, the ‘Boars Head’ in Foulton and at ‘Mama Mia’ in town. This particular Friday night was going to be special. The restaurant was packed but I had managed to book us a table for two in one of the quieter corners away from the bar. The more private the better.
“Happy?”
Polly smiled that smile of hers. Her dark hair was tied back in a simple French braid, and her red lips and pale complexion made her look like one of those Emily Bronte heroines.
I put my hand nervously into my jacket pocket. I had come close to revealing my intentions a couple of times during our meal, but felt it best to finish eating first. I felt like a teenager on his first date or a suitor about to reach over for the first kiss. Polly could sense my discomfort because after taking for ever to let a spoonful of brown sugar dissolve in her coffee cup she placed her left hand on my sleeve.
“Come on, Mike. Tell me what’s on your mind. You’ve looked on edge since we got here.”
“Nothing. I’m fine. You know, I’ve really enjoyed tonight.”
She blinked apprehensively, unsure that I was being completely truthful.
“Yeh, me too…..”
I smiled awkwardly.
“There’s somebody I want you to meet.”
I dug my right hand into my pocket again and finally pulled out…..
The look on Polly’s face was not what I had been expecting. Her mouth was open wide in a gasp of disbelief. Her dark eyes darted to mine and had the room not been so crowded I felt sure she would have pushed her chair back from our table, and stormed out there and then. The last thing I wanted was a scene in a crowded restaurant.
Fortunately, someone in chef’s whites began twirling a large flap of pasta above his head, and the rest of the kitchen staff started singing ‘Happy Birthday’ to one of the girls seated with a crowd occupying the large table to our right.
Polly leant her head closer to mine.
“Is this supposed to be your idea of a joke? For God’s sake, stick that thing back in your jacket pocket before anybody sees.”

I picked up the few loose flakes of puff pastry left on my plate. There was still a quarter of an hour to go until Gordon was due back and I was desperate for a cigarette but there were ‘No Smoking’ signs everywhere. I could feel myself starting to hyperventilate again but Jo was too busy chattering away to notice.
“Phew, I’m totally shagged, excuse my French. I never do much walking unless I’m on a shopping crusade. If I feel like punishing the plastic then I could walk around these shops all day, you know. Retail therapy they call it….. not the same kind of therapy they do back at the ranch but just as effective…..”
We had walked all the way to the Jutland Bridge then back along City Road to the station. My old hunting grounds.
“So how do you feel?”
“Ok. Still a bit weird, you know. Like I’m on the verge of having a major panic attack or something.”
“You’re doing really well, Michael. Just relax. You’ve done the hardest bit, getting off that bus earlier this afternoon. Remember what Doctor Andrews told you. You’re not taking part in a race. It’s going to take you a lot of practice getting comfortable with being back outside. But living in ‘Fenella’ is going to be great for you; a bit of independence, but still among friends…..”
“I just didn’t realise there’d be so many people….. so many faces…..”
“Don’t bother about them. They’re all too busy with their own little worries to pay any attention to you. Give it a couple of months and you’ll start realising that you really do have as much right as they do to walk up and down these streets. Don’t forget, there’s a load more crazy people out here than there are stuck inside Dee Meadows.”
She meant it kindly and I took no offence. In fact I had always thought the word ‘crazy’ had certain kudos. I still remember when I was a kid riding up and down Lawson Street for hours one day. There was this three-storey house converted into flats where some of the down-and-outs were given a temporary roof over their heads. This particular morning I could hear music coming from one of the top floor flats; some vintage Who. A guy sat at the open window frenziedly hammering out the beat by hitting the sill with a rolled up newspaper. He stuck at it for ages, gazing down at me as he did so with a wicked grin on his face, and I kept riding up and down the pavement past the house every couple of minutes or so, laughing at his madcap behaviour and feeling giddy because I was part of it. Until my sister Vi saw my antics and told mum. I ended up promising to keep away from the flats and the crazy people who lived there. How ironic.
A young, over-weight woman squeezed past, bumping against our table as she did but without a word of apology. A child loitered some distance behind; her dirty blonde hair tied into a frizzy pony tail. She paused at our table and gave me a lopsided grin until her mother turned back as soon as she reached the drinks machine and screeched at her.
“Chloe, what have I told you? Get here, right now.”
I couldn’t figure out why a mother would let a young child wander on her own so far out of reach. Shouldn’t she be holding on to her tiny hand for dear life like Jo had held on to mine?
Jo beamed at me.
“Kids, eh?”
That one can’t have been more than six years old.

I can remember Lucy’s sixth birthday party. My sister had arranged a barbecue in their back garden Polly had volunteered her services.
“So, how’re things between you two?”
“Well, I can’t say much, can I? You know all there is to know about your big brother.”
The pair burst out laughing. I left them to it. I had more important things to do. I was due to perform as soon as the feeding frenzy was over – just before they brought out the birthday cake. Lucy and her pals were engrossed in passing the parcel and my brother-in-law was busy plating up charred sausages, chicken drumsticks and burgers. He wore a full-length apron that concealed his ample body behind a cartoon set of French knickers and bra.
“What do you think you look like?”
“One of the burdens of being a dad. Just you wait, matey. Your day will come….. that is, I take it you and Polly are still at it like rabbits?”
I blushed and playfully punched him on the arm.
“A gentleman never tells.”
“No need to, matey. It’s written all over your face.”
“Is Muriel around?”
“Last time I saw her she was basting herself in the conservatory. I tried to get her to open the ruddy windows but she said the smell of cooking would carry into the house. She should be done to a turn by now…..”
“I’d better go and say Hello.”
I went across to Polly and Vi and after grabbing a refill made my excuses.
Mother was dozing in one of the wicker chairs. The blast of heat as soon as I entered the conservatory was over-powering.
“You’re going to give yourself a headache, mum. Have a sip of this then go and sit in the shade indoors, eh?”
She wiped the condensation off the outside of the glass and took an exploratory sip.
“Ugh, Coke. Too sweet for me. I don’t know how you can stomach the stuff. Isn’t Polly with you?”
“Yeh. Out there chatting to Vi.”
She squinted through the window then turned to me, grinning with pleasure.
“She’s such a lovely girl.”
“I know. Now come on. Why don’t I get you settled in the kitchen? If you sit much longer in all this heat you’ll start having your palpitations again.”
“No. I’m coming out for a bit of fresh air and a chat with your young lady. You should be out there as well enjoying yourself.”
Kevin stood next to Lucy’s climbing frame waving his spatula energetically in my direction. I was due to begin my party piece.
Sweetpea came out of hiding from behind a cushion on one of the patio chairs and started her act. The children loved her. Who wouldn’t be captivated by a little black and white bear with a cute red bow on top of her head, and a pair of roguish eyes?
Although my ventriloquist’s act was meant to be the highlight of the afternoon, the children laughed loudest when Sweetpea misbehaved. She shook up a can of Coke when I wasn’t looking, and as I pulled the tab I got showered with drink. She insisted on feeding me some trifle and, of course, I ended up with it smeared all over my face. And when Vi carried out Lucy’s birthday cake (covered in a thick layer of Barbie-pink icing) Sweetpea insisted on lighting the candles herself. Needless to say, she nearly ended up burning a hole in my t-shirt.
Kevin, Vi and mother gravitated towards me and Polly as the party wound itself down. My sister, as usual, was highly complimentary.
“You’re off your head, Mike. You really are. One day you’re going to end up hurting yourself, you big loon.”
“So what? The kids love it.”
Polly gave me an unfriendly nudge in the ribs.
“Huh. And what about me, honey-bunch? What about what I love? God, I wish he’d act his age for once.”
I could tell that Polly still wasn’t much taken with Sweetpea. The element of jealousy had been there since the night they first met at ‘Mama Mia’. I had noticed the look on her face as she watched us together, contempt rather than pride. Perhaps she was the one who needed to act her age. As the great man once said – “plenty of dummies out there but very few ventriloquists.”

- - - - -

The wide-screen TV blared out the ‘Coronation Street’ theme music in the main ward and I could hear a World Service bulletin next door where Rocking Roger was holed up. It wasn’t even eight-o’clock yet but I was too tired to concentrate on any of the soaps or listen to the radio once I’d finished tea.
“What’s up, Buttercup?”
Nurse Monica. One of the Eastern bloc émigrés who had started working here soon after Doctor Andrews took over. Despite her carefree appearance she was one of my favourites because she seemed to sense when I wanted to be left alone.
“Just knackered, that’s all.”
“Yeah, I heard all about you out on the town with Miss Josie this afternoon. I hope you were on your best behaviour.”
I grinned as she handed me my night-cap and made sure I had drained the cup before she ticked her clip-board.
“Get yourself an early night, lover boy.”
I got changed into my blue t-shirt and boxers and slumped down onto the bed. Its metal frame squeaked under my weight. I toyed with the idea of getting up again and rooting in my locker, but I was even too whacked for that tonight. The trek around town had really taken it out of me.

The noises that carried along the corridor into my room quickly subsided. I had often lain awake for hours listening to similar sounds in our house. Loud scraping noises as my father gave the coals a final poke before coming to bed. The clink of the milk bottles put out on the front step. Air thumping in the pipes as someone drew water to wash the supper dishes. The steady breathing and dreamy mutterings of my sister in the bed across the room from my own.
Clara Jane’s bawling in the next room was worst. It didn’t seem to bother Vi so much. She buried herself under her cuddly toys – a larger than life Tigger and an enormous teddy in a football kit that threatened to take over her entire bed. I had nothing to snuggle up to except my pillow. The incessant howling and the constant tramping of feet up and down stairs became a nightly torture. I longed to cuddle up next to something in the dark; something that would make the noises go away.
I vaguely remembered Sweetpea from when Vi was a toddler. The glove puppet had originally been my sister’s but she had soon grown tired of it once ‘Tiny Tears’ entered her life and it ended up in the bottom of a cardboard box together with some baby clothes. After Clara J was born and mother eventually decided it was time to resurrect Vi’s cast-offs the mislaid glove-puppet came to light.
“Oh, Violet. Look what mummy’s found up in the attic.”
My five-year-old sister looked at the bedraggled scrap of material as if she’d been offered a grimy dish cloth.
“Don’t like Sweepy any more. She’s nasty. Clara J can have her.”
That evening before getting into bed I went downstairs in my pyjamas to give everybody their goodnight kiss and there she was, abandoned on the kitchen floor underneath the table. As soon as I fit my hand inside her I felt my body relax. I sneaked her back upstairs and slept better than I had in weeks. My mother had a struggle to wake me the following morning and when she saw what I was wearing on my hand she was more bemused than annoyed.
My bond with Sweetpea became a standing joke within the immediate family. But I’m convinced that she played some part in developing my character from that of a rather shy boy to a more outgoing individual. She helped raise my self-esteem and bolster my self-confidence. She became someone for me to confide in; someone I could rely on to keep a secret. She was there for me during those darkest hours after our baby sister died in her sleep. As soon as my father broke us the tragic news that Sunday morning Vi climbed into my bed and clung on to me for comfort, but it was the puppet that I soothed with kisses not my poor little sister.

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hillwalker
12-22-2010, 10:22 AM
Part 2

“Today I’d like Michael to tell us all about his afternoon in town on Monday.”
Sarah usually warned us in advance if we were to give a little talk in group about our feelings – one of our ‘disclosures’. But today she had put me on the spot without the merest hint.
I told them all the places we had seen, described the colourful barges on the canal, the new pedestrianised streets between Cripplesgate and Foregate, the massive building site for ‘Tesco’ where S & K garage had stood, and having a sausage roll and a coffee at the station cafeteria.
“That’s brilliant, Michael. Isn’t that right, everybody?”
Sarah went round the group and got some of the other members to praise my efforts before continuing.
“Does anybody remember what Michael used to be like when we first started this group a couple of years ago?”
I’d hardly uttered a word for four and a half years….. anything was progress, no matter now banal.
“He wouldn’t even tell us what he liked watching on TV. Bottling everything up. And now, well I’m so proud of you. I didn’t even give you a chance to prepare yourself, and look what you did. You drew such a vivid picture; it was like we were there with you.”
I could feel a warm sensation swelling in my chest.
“So aren’t you going to tell us, Michael, what you were feeling like when you were gallivanting about town?”
Sneaky b1tch. Sneaky, sneaky b1tch. But I was used to being given the third degree by Sarah. I’ve been here long enough to know how the system works.
“Um. Really scared, if I’m honest. Sort of guilty as well, because I didn’t think I was supposed to be out there, if you know what I mean.”
A circle of nodding heads.
“And by the time we got to the café I was starting to panic a bit. I knew we’d have to wait for half an hour before the bus was due to pick us up and I was worried somebody would come in who knew me from the old days. Or somebody who could tell just by looking at me that I was different. It was like I couldn’t even breathe. I had to concentrate really hard on relaxing thoughts the way you’ve always told me to.”
“Well done. Has anybody else here ever felt the way Michael felt?”
More nodding heads.
“Remember how we used to talk about proper breathing technique when I started this group? What did we say we were trying to stop when we struggled for breath, Frankie?”
“Um….. trying to stop life getting inside us. Trying to keep it out, miss.”
“Exactly. So is that what you were trying to do yesterday afternoon when you started having a panic attack, Michael?”
“Yes, I suppose so.”
“Well done. Life’s not easy is it?”
I shook my head.
“Not easy trying to fit back into the real world after such a long time. You said yourself that you were scared. I can tell you something, Michael. Everybody here is scared – not just you and this group but me and Brian, Gordon, Josie….. We all get scared sometimes. But we learn to change focus. We learn to put things that scare us to one side so that even the worst bits we see on the news don’t end up being the only things we think about every minute of the day.”
Rocking Roger started pitching back and forth in his chair but Sarah chose to ignore him for now.
“We learn to concentrate on the good stuff in our lives instead. It’s called coping.”
I’d heard it all before. Coping strategies. Keeping a diary of good thoughts and bad thoughts. Making a list of why I should feel good about myself. I could run this group myself if I was that way inclined.
“So what should Michael say to himself when he feels a panic attack coming on?”
Group mantra.
“I’m not scared anymore.”

The truth is I had never been scared. I had always been able to stand on my own two feet without help from anybody else.
“For God’s sake, mum. Why do you keep going on and on about things that are none of your business? Can’t you let me live my own life for once?”
Mother’s voice as vitriolic as ever. “Huh, that’s your response every time, Michael. Whenever anybody tries to give you a bit of advice, or….. Oh, I don’t know.”
“Advice? Why the Hell should I need advice from you? I’m happy. We’re both happy.”
“What? Polly’s happy that you’re still hanging on to that ruddy thing? Like a flaming crutch? You need to ask her. Have the guts to talk to her about things. If she loves you like you say she does she’ll help you. I know she will. She’s a clinking good girl. You don’t know how lucky you are.”
I could cheerfully throttle the old bag when she was like this.
“Don’t look at me like that. I know you think I shouldn’t interfere. I just think it’s time you started handling your emotions the same way everybody else does – by talking about them instead of keeping them bottled up.”
I really did not need this conversation. I had only called round to share some good news; that Polly had finally agreed to move in with me. And here she was giving me the third degree.
“It’s nothing to do with bottling things up.”
“Of course it is. It always has been. You’d never let me get close to you when you were a child, and you’re in danger of behaving exactly the same way with Polly. Do us all a favour and throw that ruddy thing out before it ruins things between the two of you.”
“Sweetpea is not a ‘ruddy thing’ as you keep calling her. I keep a glove puppet in the flat, so what? Polly’s fine about the whole situation. And for your information I do talk to her about things, so don’t tell me I bottle stuff up.”
“I don’t believe you. I know you of old, Michael. I just wish I’d given it the charity shop instead of putting it away with your sister’s baby things.”
“Can’t you just be happy for us? Polly and me are starting a new life together and all you can talk about is Sweetpea. I bet Rod Hull never got this much grief. Oh, and don’t go thinking I haven’t heard about you having this exact same conversation with Polly behind my back. As I said, we do talk. About everything. No secrets, so…...”
A spasm of embarrassment crossed mother’s face, but I rested my arm on her shoulder.
“Anyway. Time I went. Just think on. There’s no need to stir things up between me and Polly is there?”
She shook her head, chastened to silence for once.
How would she have felt if she’d realised I’d brought Sweetpea here with me in my attaché case this afternoon? She’d have called for the men in white coats, probably.

- - - - -

Gordon had packed all my worldly goods into three large cardboard boxes. Two of the younger inmates had ridden with us in the mini-bus to ‘Fenella’ and helped carry the boxes upstairs to my second floor flat.
Jo was already there waiting for us, along with Mrs. Yates, the daytime supervisor.
“Here we are. Come in, all of you.”
The room still smelt of fresh paint and cheap air freshener. My boxes were stacked underneath the window and then everyone went their separate ways apart from Jo. She helped me take my coat and scarf off.
“Do you want a hand unpacking?”
I wasn’t sure that I did. I couldn’t handle Jo being mother hen all of a sudden.
“No. ‘Course you don’t. I bet you don’t want me fussing round here any longer than necessary. I just need to take you downstairs and show you everything. Oh, and here’s my card. It’s got my mobile number on it. I’ll be calling round two or three days a week at first anyway to see how you’re coping. But if you ever need me or just want someone to talk to give me a buzz. That’s what I’m here for. There’s a payphone down in Reception.”
We took the stairs to the ground floor. Overlooking the gardens at the back was the large dining room complete with sink unit, kitchen cupboards, fridge, dish-washer, toaster and microwave.
“You get your meals at set times, but if you want a snack or even a late breakfast you’re allowed to make it yourself in here. You can also heat up your own ready meals in the microwave if you fancy a change from ‘Fenella’ fodder. Oh, and washing the dishes is one of the communal chores. They put a list up every Saturday night of who has to do what the following week. Just be thankful they have a dishwasher here now. In the old days whoever was on dining room duties had to wash eight lots by hand after every meal.”
She took me into the games room where a couple of shady characters were playing pool. Their eyes followed Jo’s every move as she led me past them and into the communal TV room (non-smoking), toilets, a store room for the cleaning equipment, and Reception where two young women and Mrs. Yates worked.
“Mrs. Yates will probably want to have a proper chat with you after I’ve gone. She goes through the rules with everybody when they first move in and explains how everything works. No need to look so worried.”
She reached up on tiptoe and gave me a gentle peck on the cheek before leaving. I stood in the narrow conservatory outside Reception and watched her drive off in her little red Fiat. I hadn’t even known what sort of car she owned until today.
Mrs. Yates was like a second mother to the eight of us. She told me I’d be given special treatment for the first week. No chores just yet. But she also stressed that the rules were important and had to be adhered to for everybody’s mutual benefit. No drugs or alcohol, obviously; no guests upstairs in our bedrooms unless authorised. No smoking anywhere on the premises. I smirked to myself. Pretty much the same as Dee Meadows. No loud music. Room curfew 10.30 p.m. No hot food or drinks to be taken upstairs and no dishes or cutlery to be taken out of the dining area – mugs excepted.
“We used to go through cereal dishes and dessert spoons like nobody’s business. And half the cups and saucers ended up smashed after being left out on the garden benches. If you’ve got a bit of spare cash you’re better off buying your own personal mug like the others do.”
On my second week I was put in charge of rubbish disposal. There were two big green skips out by the front gate. Before breakfast every morning I had to collect the empty boxes and the bin bags from the kitchen, and empty the waste bins from Reception and the games room.

“Can you stick the bin bags outside the gate on your way out, darling?”
Polly was still in bed. I’d had to get up at six in order to drive down to Bedworth for yet another Sales conference. Since my promotion I seemed to be spending more and more time out of the office.
What with the company car and BUPA as well as a hefty pay rise, the tiny flat had soon lost its appeal. As soon as we got married Polly and I moved into a four-bedroomed, detached Edwardian on the outskirts of town. Vi, Kevin and little Lucy had already been for a gander, after mum had given her seal of approval, of course.
It was definitely a step up from Darwin Park, but I still had to carry my own garbage bags out to the roadside every Friday morning.
I flipped the tongue of my tie inside my buttoned-up waistcoat and dashed upstairs to give Polly a final hug and a kiss before setting off.
“Mm, I wish I could snuggle in there for a bit longer with the two of you.”
“Never mind thinking about my bump, you horny brute. Get out there and earn some pennies.”
She grabbed the back of my head and pulled my face down to meet hers.
“God, I love you so much. Make sure you drive carefully, honey-bunch….. oh, and don’t forget the bin bags will you?”
I lugged the heaviest one out from the garage first. It stank of banana skins and fish. The chances were the cats would have a go at it before the bin men turned up if I left it as it was. The second bag was thankfully much lighter and less than half full. I could put the bag with the kitchen waste inside that and hopefully the neighbourhood moggies would be none the wiser.
When I untied the smaller bag I found an old rugby shirt crumpled up inside it. A smile of regret crossed my face. It was the one I always used for decorating when I’d had the time and inclination for DIY. It had become splashed with a variety of colours over the years but it was still one of my favourite tops. I pulled it out and contemplated sticking it in the laundry basket, but I knew what Polly would say. She had already taken drastic action with the contents of my wardrobe.
I decided that life was too short and stuck it back in the depths of the bin bag. Then I felt a sudden hollowing out of my gut as my eyes fixed on a tiny triangle of red material. My breathing became laboured. I could feel every beat of my heart as if it was lodged inside my head. It was Sweetpea’s hair-bow. I delved deeper into the bag. Pulled her tiny body free and held her to my quivering lips. What the Hell was happening here? Had mum got to Polly after all?
How could she? The woman who was carrying my child; who had told me how much she loved me only moments earlier?
I staggered back indoors in a daze and fumbled blindly inside the kitchen drawer. A corkscrew and pizza slicer spilled onto the floor as I searched desperately for anything sharp. Then with my lungs bursting I dashed up the stairs as if the house was on fire.
I didn’t even look at Polly as I launched myself onto the bed.
Stab, stab, stab.
Sweetpea stabbing holes into the bed sheets.
Stab, stab, stab.
Red splotches everywhere and a hiccoughing, weeping noise that slowly grew weaker until my pain was over and there were just the two of us left. Happy again.

- - - - -

I sometimes wonder what might have happened if I hadn’t opened that bag. Would life have carried on as normal? Mother would probably still be alive – everyone said it was the shock that killed her. Damn her to Hell, I say.
Now I’m in ‘Fenella’ things don’t seem so bad. I still have to take my meds twice a day. I still need Jo or one of the staff to help me when I go shopping, or to the Benefits office. But I really am a better person. I can take responsibility for my actions; play my part in society.
I still cradle my little box at night when I shut my bedroom door and switch off the bedside light. It’s the same old shoe box with the lid taped on.
“You know you must never take Sweetpea out of this box, don’t you?”
One of the first things Doctor Andrews did when he reviewed my case was to hand Sweetpea back to me. To put her back in my ‘care’ as he called it. Even though I never got to hold her again properly; slide my right hand into her soft pouch and look into those innocent eyes.
“She will always be with you, Michael. It’s your job to look after her. But she has to be kept in her box. We’ve had a long talk about this, haven’t we? And you understand why. We all agree it’s for the best.”
Reluctantly I had complied right up to this day. Sweetpea had been a bad influence but I couldn’t use that as an excuse any longer. I admit it now. It was me who stabbed my wife to death. Killed Polly and her unborn baby in our bed. Doctor Andrews had spent a long time explaining how, if I wanted to get better, I had to accept responsibility for my offending behaviour and take control of my emotions. It was why I had to keep taking my meds for the rest of my life – they helped keep the bad feelings safely locked up in another box, somewhere deep inside my head.
But at least, in the privacy of my bedroom, I could explain it all to Sweetpea; confident that no orderly or nurse would over-hear our conversation. I had so much to tell her. How much I had missed her. How bad I felt about her being kept shut up inside that box. How good I had been at keeping our secret; our special secret. About the pillow that Sweetpea had pressed over Clara J’s face all those years ago.
And now Jo is coming round to take me to the market in Elland Street. My best friend….. and the woman who’s trying to control my life all over again. I’m already dressed and waiting. But I’m on edge. I need a cigarette but that will have to wait because you can’t even smoke on the bus. This can’t wait. There’s something I promised to do for Sweetpea first.
I’ve wandered downstairs into the kitchen for some reason. I’m feeling more stressed than normal about spending time with Jo, if I’m honest. The dishwasher has finished its rinse cycle and needs emptying. But that’s not my job this week so I pull back. I inch the cutlery drawer open nervously. Slide it shut then open it half way again.
I can see the knives in there. I slide one of the steak knives up inside the sleeve of my anorak. Then I walk back upstairs. I know exactly where I’m going and don’t need anyone’s help.
I step into my room. I hadn’t even bothered closing the door and Jo is standing inside waiting. It’s as if she already knows.
“There you are. I couldn’t find you, and Katie said as far as she knew you were up here getting ready.”
I can feel my face burning up. I try to concentrate on nice things like Sarah told me to but all I can think about is what I have to do next.
Jo steps closer.
“Are you ok, Michael? Your face is all red.”
I let the handle of the knife slip down into my waiting hand. Then I rearrange my grip, trying to remove it without being too obvious. Jo’s eyes drop to the glinting blade as if I’ve just performed a magic trick.
“What’s that? Michael, come on, show me.”
Her harsh words now suddenly like razors slashing my skin. Mother’s voice all over again. Like a transfusion of vitriol into my bloodstream.
“It’s nothing, all right?”
I stare straight into her face. She’s so pretty. I’m finding it easier to breathe now, remembering what Sarah taught me. Breathing technique – let life in, don’t fight it. I’m not scared any more.
“Look, it’s just something I have to do before I go out.”
The box is on the bedside cupboard behind her. I keep it where I can see it now, no longer hidden away in the back of a nasty locker in all that darkness like some dirty secret. Joe’s eyes are everywhere.
She steps in front of me as if offering me a light.
”Listen, I can see you’ve got a knife there, Michael. You know the rules…..”
“Yes I know. I just….”
I push my way past her, the blade poised like a surgical instrument.
“No, Michael. Not until you tell me what you’re doing.”
“I’m not going to hurt you. Ok?”
“Michael. Please!”
“I thought you said you trusted me.”
I grab the box and, as I turn to face her, hold it before me like an offering. I sob with frustration as I feel myself suffocating.
“Michael….. is that Sweetpea?”
Polly’s voice all over again, tainted with jealousy.
Stab, stab, stab.
Suddenly I feel a warm sensation swelling in my chest.
Stab, stab, stab.
The cardboard lid of the box almost crushed under my fingers.
Stab, stab.
Jo’s hands on my arms, struggling to push them away.
Stab, stab.
Smears of blood on the sleeve of her coat.
Stab.
Energy draining away now as I realise what I’ve done.
Stab.
I don’t even register the blade as it catches my left thumb.
Breathing easier now. Relaxing thoughts washing over me like a summer downpour. Joe’s weak attempts at trying to restrain me already abandoned.
Our arms become disentangled. I try to grab her to stop her falling. Try to reason with her, but she is already screaming for help. I grab her face; squeezing, trying to stop the sounds coming out of her mouth.
“Shush. It’s ok now….. it’s finished.”
Her features become increasingly distorted.
“Look, I didn’t want to hurt anyone. Ok? I’m just doing what Sarah said.”
Just a mewing noise as her struggles to escape finally collapse in upon themselves.
“Just letting life in. Can’t you see?”
Her breath rasping in her throat as I press down on top of her. Giving up on the squirming now that she knows there is nothing more she can do.
“I had to make a few holes, see. Had to let some air into her box so she can breathe.”

- o – 0 – o -

zoolane
12-22-2010, 04:06 PM
Wow great,powerful and interest story. I love way you portrait Micheal 1 st of all was not sure he prisioner then about half I realize mental patient absolute love the way puppet was given the personality which in turn control Micheal.

Jack of Hearts
12-22-2010, 04:51 PM
The last parts of this burn like they've been covered in lighter fluid.

It's almost fragmenting, in a way, how the first part is so languid and lax. Your reader most definitely did not see the heinous act coming- melodramatic novels like 'Flowers for Algernon' and 'One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest' come to mind, the lull being onset from the start. But this is not a story about a man being unable to cope in life due to an emotional crutch he never grew away from. It's a story about a man with a crutch who acts out.

The prose itself has sufficient economy and flow to maintain interest. There is an odd sense of detachment, even when the narrator is describing emotions. It seems more like calculated narrative than the narrator's inability to deal with his own emotions.

Nice of Chloe to make a cameo, rest her soul. And Michael isn't exactly a math teacher this time around (though your reader suspects he may have had him for high school geometry).

You reader sees a heady set-up that consumes virtually the entire first part. Then there's a kind of humor. There doesn't seem to be a significant idea addressed (but there is character exploration, for example as Michael is stabbing the box we are witness to several concepts about accepting responsibility, and evidence that Sweetpea as a concept can be removed from the character's murderous nature). Any further exploration of an emotional-developmental crutch is foregone and is comparatively sparse to begin with. Instead the reader is presented horrendous violence and half imagines you laughing as you wrote it in a 'they'll never see this coming' kind of way. So much investment has been put into the story up until the point Sweetpea is pulled out of the garbage and it seems squandered by the combination of the action and the distanced nature of the narrative. The murder isn't presented in an emotionally pertinent way (perhaps the detachment is in favor of displaying a sociopathic nature). The line 'Happy again.' does stick out.

Also wanted to mention the gnomen at dinner with Polly. The object in the pocket is not yet definite- your reader initially imagined a small rodent or genitals being... 'whipped out'(having neglected to note it was a 'jacket' pocket- perhaps the reader is just projecting modern American dating culture on this part!). The most sound idea was a wedding ring. Come to find out its Sweetpea. This was quite well done.

Despite everything, a good story, and these are heat-of-the-moment gut level critiques by your reader, who was perhaps expecting a more literary outing (as in 'Chloe's Poem') rather than something more along the lines of Stephen King. This must have been fun to write.

hillwalker
12-22-2010, 05:20 PM
Thanks @Jack for reading this lengthy piece.


This must have been fun to write.

Precisely.

I came up with the closing image after reading in the press that a famous British ventriloquist (Harry Corbett - Sooty and Sweep's 'controller') would never allow his puppets to travel anywhere with him unless their packing cases had air holes inserted!

From that bizarre gem of information it was a breeze to come up with a plot and work from finish to start. And it's pure escapist story-telling - no literary pretentions in sight.

@Zoo - a bit of black humour; to your liking, I guess. Thanks for your response.

Delta40
12-22-2010, 05:42 PM
Wow. That was a gripping read and although there was some elements of predictability in it, I was caught in the whole tangle of of his reasoning and I was especially interested in his relationship with Sweetpea.

Great Stuff Hill

Steven Hunley
12-22-2010, 10:36 PM
This was a long read but a good read. By the end I was catching my breath. Although my lungs are not my guts I call that a visceral reaction.

I was reminded of a good friend who did too much amphetamine. He started carrying around a ventriloquist's dummy who he named Ned. He would have speed-freak jive conversations with it. It got so worn down that eventually the body was gone and only the head remained. That's when he started calling it "Ned the Head". One question though. What does this mean?

Most of the young lads went through a tube of toothpaste a week in here since drawing pins were not allowed.

I'm not sure what drawing pins are.

Like Jack of hearts said: The last part burned like lighter fluid. I couldn't have said it better.

hillwalker
12-23-2010, 06:03 AM
Thanks @Delta and @Steve for reading and commenting. The idea was to get the reader hyperventilating before the end....

Steve - drawing pins are the same as thumb tacks - used for sticking up posters/pictures on a wall. But since sharp objects were not allowed they used toothpaste instead (it can act as an adhesive, drying quite quickly so I'm informed).

Best wishes and thanks again

H

MANICHAEAN
12-24-2010, 01:12 PM
H
Your stories are so few and far between that I wanted time to read & digest this one.

So today being the weekend here, (and Christmas Eve!), then what better time to review ‘Sweetpea” than alone at the bar, suitably mellowed by John Lee bourbon.

Excuse the somewhat disjointed review and the images it evoked as follows:

1. Miss Russell (call me Jo), you have captured well & there is more perceived depth to her as the tale unwinds i.e. starts off with that institutionalized phraseology, almost talking down and then a stronger more unorthodox character comes through, bringing an ounce of “burn.” Later with the touch of her warm glove, we move further into the tactile reassurance stage. I found myself asking “Who does Jo depend on?” “Trust me” reminded me of the Jewish definition of foreplay! Jo as a character was pivotal. I’ve got one of my guys here at the moment that has an aggressive cancer growth on the lung, which will in the near future require either surgery or chemo or both. Your story brought this to mind on the options of an outsider: embarrassment, encouragement or a straight forward “Do you know you are likely to die. What can I do to help?”

2. Having praised Jo as coming through so vivid, would an expansion of the relatively shadowy figure of Dr Andrews have been a benefit?

3. Good imagery of the ever present, lost, condemned tribe of smokers outside various corporate headquarters Unclean, unclean! Likewise with the guilt of going outside the institution and the concept of “I know who you are and what you have done.”

4. The trip outside was well handled. Every time I spend any time in the London I knew as a boy and a young man, it is disconcerting. You always have those memories of the 1960’s and the coffee bars and my Dad would have turned in his grave regards the desecration of his local into a “theme” pub.

5. The planning for the outing incorporating an element of freedom made me associate with the build up of landing on the beaches in Northern France on D Day. Shows you what a crazy imagination I have!

6. Polly & “yer” scheming Ma came across superbly. Why do they always feel so threatened by something they do not have 100% control over? And I’m not just talking about “another woman” but even things as innocuous as a glove puppet? Then the betrayal element, so essential to the story.

7. I liked the brother in law cooking bit “a la Keith Floyd” “We’ll just add a bit of wine to the dish and drink a bit ourselves!”

8. Nurse Monica reminded me of that line in D.H.Lawrence’s The Rainbow; “he loved anyone who could convey enlightenment to him through feeling.” Sensitivity.

9. The jury is still out in my mind on the ending. The early narrative lulls the reader, then it’s the naked steel & interwoven in it all is this grown up man with an obsession to what was so comforting in dark periods in his life. Both detachment & reassurance mixed up yet not in equipoise. It must be a very British thing. The Americans have faith in psychiatrists, the French in showing their emotions openly, the religious in their respective faiths & dogmas, but for the Brits perhaps it’s still a hangover of “Oh George what a lovely ceiling!”

10. Merry Christmas bach. M.

hillwalker
12-24-2010, 01:55 PM
Thanks for this enlightening crit - pleased to have provided some nibbles to accompany your aperitif.

I guess the British are noted for bottling up their emotions - which of course has been Michael's problem all along. It wasn't intended as a deep, psychological portrayal of an injured individual, just a little macabre humour. And of course the psychiatrists managed to brainwash him somewhat - his seeing the need to 'let in life' as it were.... and the anecdote about Harry Corbett I mention in one of my earlier responses to this thread probably illustrates how fine a line can be drawn between the inanimate and the living.

Thanks again, and 'Nadolig llawen'

H

scvile
12-24-2010, 07:33 PM
I'm not done with the story yet--lots of Christmas stuff to do, and I want to do the story justice by reading closely--but what I've read is remarkably well written.

How did you divide the story into two parts?

hillwalker
12-25-2010, 10:56 AM
How did you divide the story into two parts?

If you mean technically - I Selected the first part of the story, pressed Copy (in Word) then Pasted the selection into a new thread on here - then I did the same for the second part.

If you mean, how did I choose to make the break where I did - it was close to the half way point and I thought 2 parts would be easier for readers on here to digest (like my Christmas dinner is doing now).

Hope you enjoy the rest of the story when you get round to it - and thanks for persevering with this.

H

kittypaws
12-27-2010, 01:51 AM
Hello H~

I acutually printed out your story...old fashion I reckon, I get more out of reading from paper. At first I did not understand why the subject kept changing then I got it...sometimes a litte slow I am...You did an awesome job of the write....I was wondering why Michael was in the insitution....then you showed why and I was quite surprised! I would think someone of that nature would be imprisioned. But none the less I realy enjoyed your write....there is always hope for everyone!!

kittypaws

:)

hillwalker
12-27-2010, 08:52 AM
Thanks for the read, kitty. The 'institution' was a hospital for the criminally insane - and of course, as he tells us at the start, he is getting better (!).

Best regards

H