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Jerrybaldy
12-19-2010, 06:32 PM
My abdomen swells daily
beneath the sag
of two bags
that forget the desire
they inspired.
Was the pause
the menopause
or has this old lady
a mutant baby
inside?
If so
it's afloat in vino.
If not
its my liver
engorged to submission
or a blackness
eating cells
that will never burst to life.
Or will it cry
as I cry now?
Sipping red wine,
sucking grey smoke,
that it may inflate
those two bags
and return me
to any time
when I didnt
have a life
or a death
inside me.

Delta40
12-19-2010, 06:36 PM
heading south, weighed by the chains of motherhood. you make it sound so totally bleak. where's my vino.....

Jerryesque as ever.

Jerrybaldy
12-19-2010, 06:42 PM
Its a baby to a mother who can't be one or maybe sclerosis or cancer. I made it no bleaker than it is.

Delta40
12-19-2010, 06:45 PM
I chose motherhood instead of deteriorating health

bleak is your middle name Jerry!

Haunted
12-19-2010, 06:48 PM
afloat in vino
yikes...

yet outshine'd by the stunning end:
return me
to any time
when I didnt
have a life
or a death
inside me.

Jerrybaldy
12-19-2010, 06:52 PM
No. That is David. I only posted this as the subject will never read it.

Haunted
12-19-2010, 06:57 PM
David?

Jerrybaldy
12-19-2010, 07:03 PM
middle name :)

Haunted
12-19-2010, 07:16 PM
J.d.b?

hillwalker
12-20-2010, 07:37 AM
A fairly dark piece - for some reason I pictured a bag-lady perhaps with her bottle of 'red biddy' - her ruined body shrunken by malnutrition, her belly swollen by cirrhosis rather than pregnancy....
But regardless of the true motivation behind this, it's a powerful poem made more so by the brevity of the lines and lack of self-pity.

H

Jerrybaldy
12-20-2010, 06:45 PM
It is my sister and I find out the answer tomorrow.