Beast of Legend/Warning

[Revolte]

Each one seemed to stand alone just fine, so I split the piece into two separate poems, each speaking of the same beast.


“Beast Of Legend”

'Twas a beast so foul in stench
your nostrils toss and fight,
with wings so large and gut so hot
his breath lit up the night,
you could call his name and wield your sword
far beyond the stars,
but with tattered wings he'd aim and swoop
and cut right through your heart.

“Beast Of Legend: Warning”

“Worry not!” They shout
“The beast is but a fib,
deep within the children's thought
this brilliant stories writ.”
Well heed my warning friends you see
I say it's more then lore,
trust your nose and fear sky
or feel the dragons scorn.

[soundofmusic]

Brilliant Revolte, This would make a great epic poem.

[Hawkman]

This is great fun Revolte, and I think it would be ok as a single poem. You might want to change head for heed though. This would work up into a great kiddies story methinks.

Best, H

[hillwalker]

I agree with Hawk - they work well enough as a single poem, with a lot of scope for expansion into a longer piece wethinks.

H

[blank|verse]

Very good, Revolte, maybe some alliteration would work well here.

Other than that, I'd watch you don't get Hawk's lawyers after you - he's pretty much copyrighted this style of poetry on the forum! :)

[Delta40]

I think its power is as one poem too Revolte.

Well head my warning friends you see

Do you mean to say 'Heed my warning well friends...'

[Revolte]

oh crap, too many nights spent in the 60's I can't tell the difference between head and heed now lol, oh well, fixin' that. Anway everyone thank you :), eh, until I figure out what that damned cat was really getting at (I dont trust them kitties) I have full ability to write about creatures muahahhahaha.

[nightshifft]

from one old dragon to another loved it

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