Novae

[hack]

Walking the folded desert
with it's faded scent of rain,
on this grave of ancient beaches,
over links in life's long chain.

Where foam spray once sprang skyward
from a ragged wind torn sea,
though eons lie here underfoot,
there is only you and me.

Wading through deep memories
my numbered steps are few,
as I leave them there behind me
I only think of you.

[Bar22do]

A soft gentle song, hack, immersing in nostalgia, saddened by finality of death, but comforted by love, stronger than time, eternal... bright.
It is not often that you use rhyme, hack... thanks for coming back with this one. Bar

[Hawkman]

Faultless metre, pleasing rhyme and haunting imagery, all combine to make this a great poem, hack. Always a pleasure to read you.

Live long and prosper, H

[hillwalker]

I particularly enjoyed the first verse with the immensity of geological time condensed so neatly into 4 lines.

H

[Haunted]

Wonderful descriptive contrasts of a special desert before and after. I could be totally off base but I do feel a pang of loss, perhaps someone who returned to dust and now part of the land.

[Delta40]

Nice Hack. One really can see you 'wading' through the sand as you leave the memories behind. A sea of them...

[blank|verse]

Almost missed this one... It's very nicely crafted, hack, powerful and concise and very contemplative. I liked the internal 'folded / faded' echo in the first two lines.

Personally, I found the ending a little too sweet. Maybe both the narrator and his other could have been walking across the sands; this would certainly reinforce the point being made, unless the 'other' is God, which would change things completely (and perhaps sounds odd in a poem called 'Novae').

Either way, an enjoyable poem.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Walking the folded desert
with it's faded scent of rain,


Could you keep that up, I wondered whenm I first encountered it? It was so natural, so seemingly spontaneous...

and yes, you did more than keep it up.

[hack]

Thanks all for your reads and comments.
Happy holidays, one and all...peace...

[Big Dante]

I enjoyed this.
It seemed to flow along nicely before ending in such a sweet manner.