The Mouse.

[zoolane]

A mice run out of the field as fast tiny legs would carry him, not far behind was farmer with his tractor. He glance round to see if noise of wheels were ready crush him. He weaver in and out of golden wheat, at sway in the summer breeze, he came sudden stop and realize that the crunch noise was gone. Brown fur was wet from he sweat, his body was trying catch it breathe and wait for noise to beginning again.

The little Field mouse passes out from exhausted from heat and having run for hes life. The night came with it torch shining bright, the beam woke up little creature, his stomach rumbling for supper, he look round of some wheat which being knock out of it stem and he see some few yards way so gingerly decide to go for it.He gentle, quite play hide and seek with the torch in the sky. He nearly here, he can see his supper in the distance and all his attention is focus on the golden straws. When out of no where Owl has appear the night sky, the Owl open his paws, reaching out and stoop the mouse up.

[MatthewFarlow]

I like this story very much. It reads like a modern fable. I would have liked one more sentence at the end because it ended so abruptly that I had to read the last part twice to discover what had happened. I also was unsure as to what the 'torch in the sky' was, but that was most likely my own stupidity.

All in all, it was a good, quick read.

[sweety]

Well done,
I can see it happening before my eyes.
I love short pieces like this.
Shine on silvery moon....:coolgleamA:

[zoolane]

I like this story very much. It reads like a modern fable. I would have liked one more sentence at the end because it ended so abruptly that I had to read the last part twice to discover what had happened. I also was unsure as to what the 'torch in the sky' was, but that was most likely my own stupidity.

All in all, it was a good, quick read.

Thank you for comment, edited the end few lines in regards of the Owl and I think the 'torch' was great way of describe the moon.

Thank you Sweety for comment.

[hillwalker]

Yes, I managed to work out the moon was the mouse's torch. A lovely kiddies' story.... until that sudden, swift ending. Yummy.

H