an evening by the fire

[Sampson]

i got my green tea, my thai weed
and a battered copy of dostoyevsky
i sip my tea and light my sensi
before thumbing these faded pages
searching for the resting place
of a bookmark which is actually
a train ticket i used once upon a time
on a journey of the mind and i'm
smiling sitting by this fireside
i sigh and watch steam rising
from my cup watching smoke filtering
up towards the ceiling and i'm
still a dreamer just like i was
but i'm just chilling out tonight
because dreams can be as simple
as me sitting with my green tea
this thai weed and a old copy of
a novel by dostoyevsky beside me

[blank|verse]

This flowed really well, Sampson, a simple subject but it worked very well. Good stuff.

You might want to remove 'I sigh' from line 10, as it slows down the flow; and the second reference at the end to the copy of Dostoyevsky seems unnecessary. Is there anything different you can do? Maybe you could change it so you're looking at Dostoyevsky, or reading his thoughts, or something that transforms the scene - and might seem appropriate if you've been smoking something stronger than tobacco...

[Haunted]

Perhaps you could end with "just a dreamer", the rest is self explanatory. One thought surpasses the next and the flow is seamless.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I do admire the things that were mentioned by Haunted and B|V but disagree with B|V's objection to the 2nd reference to Dostoievski, which I think makes an essential point: that is, the everydayness of the scene, the fact that Dostoievski has been around in your life for quite some time, no big deal, no more than is the green tea or the Thai weed.