Insect Love

[Delta40]

You drone on erratically
across humid currents;
the urgent instinct of your
parasitic itch motivates
your membranous wings
on a turbulent crusade.

You hanker after my wafting scent
while I remain oblivious
to such aberrant journeys.
Like one of a million buzzing gnats,
you unfurl your mouth parts
and target my plenteous vitality.

Let me remind you, insect
your bloodlust is soon squelched
by the zero impact you have
when you hit my windscreen.

[Hawkman]

Ode to a mozzy, love it. You're not in Darwin are you? I hear they're as big as sparrows up there!

H

[PrinceMyshkin]

There is something about this very adult, very cerebral vocabulary that appears to be taunting the poor, virtually inarticulate mosquitoes. Mind, I can hear a buzzing throughout this poem.

[Delta40]

lol. It does have an adult tone to it. People get swatted all the time in love....

[Transmodernism]

You drone on erratically
across humid currents;
the urgent instinct of your
parasitic itch motivates
your membranous wings
on a turbulent crusade.

You hanker after my wafting scent
while I remain oblivious
to such aberrant journeys.
Like one of a million buzzing gnats,
you unfurl your mouth parts
and target my plenteous vitality.

Let me remind you, insect
your bloodlust is soon squelched
by the zero impact you have
when you hit my windscreen.

Very effective poem. The premise is simple, but it works. I think the most powerful and effective component here are your adjectives: "parasitic," "membraneous," "aberrant," "buzzing," "plenteous." But I also felt that your choice of diction in general was very effective, using words not normally connected with insects which are rendered more interesting by the connection (e.g. "crusade," "vitality," "bloodlust," and "unfurl").

Great use of words!

[Delta40]

thanks Transmodernism. I look forward to reading some of your work!

[Delta40]

Ode to a mozzy, love it. You're not in Darwin are you? I hear they're as big as sparrows up there!

H

Lol. I heard they're gigantic!

[Jerrybaldy]

obviously sod all to do with insects x

[Delta40]

obviously sod all to do with insects x

How astute of you Jerry :seeya:

[Haunted]

This is what I call a feel good poem. Drive faster and longer, get 'em all Delta!

[Delta40]

This is what I call a feel good poem. Drive faster and longer, get 'em all Delta!

Men or Mosquitoes?

[Haunted]

Men or Mosquitoes?

no comment :D

[firefangled]

A fitting poem for the harbingers of spring and fall.

We have Love Bugs here in Florida in the spring. There are clouds of the copulating creatures.

Given the speed of a car and the state they are in, I doubt they know what hits them.

[Delta40]

Thanks Firefangled. Queensland just had its worst locust plague in 30 years, mainly due to the floods I think. I can't believe they can eat 20 tonnes of vegetation per day! Alot of cars needed there...

[Jerrybaldy]

Last thing that goes through his mind as he hits your screen? His arse.

[Delta40]

lol. I doubt he cares.