A Moment On Your Lips

[Dark Muse]

A Moment On Your Lips

Whisper me your lies
as sweet nothings in my ear
I rather hear all the pretty words
than divine truth from falsehood,
unlock the secrets of the muse
to inspire your lovers verse.

Dazzle my eyes with illusion,
I much rather believe than perceive,
murmur into my skin all the flattery
you can conceive, I will live upon the
moment of your lips, let promises
wash away in the wind the moment
they pass.

Turn the gilded key of my heart
with your veneer of tender love
and passions of serenades
on drunken moonless nights.

And when the day comes
that you leave me far behind
it will all wash away in the morning rain,
I will awaken, a new blossomed rose
awaiting another to unfurl me
with their sweet evaporating
ministrations.

[hillwalker]

I was intrigued by the way you conveyed the idea of how falsehoods spoken by a lover perhaps are sometimes better appreciated than the cold truth of reality.

There are some wonderful lines here spoken from the perspective of 'the other woman' - a great poem, DM.

H

[yuka]

A Moment On Your Lips

a charming title,. the same as your verse. love your poem :)

[Dark Muse]

Thank you! I wanted to capture this idea of someone who just lives so completely in the moment, that nothing matters but what is done or said by that second, and what is to come, or what is past do not exist in the world of this person, they live only for the now, and so they rather be showered in pretty words regardless of the sincerity, because as soon as the lover leaves he will cease to exist for her.

[cogs]

it's so flowing and stylish. i like how you kept the actions with the stanzas: whisper, dazzle, turn.
i just have 2 things: the use of 'rather' alone, without 'would rather', or its contraction, 'i'd rather'; also, the last line, i would say 'evaporations' and leave out the last word.
"i will live upon the moment of your lips" is really nice.

[Dark Muse]

I did intentionally write it as rather alone, because I like the way it sounds better poetically than adding in the would, which would just be an extra syllable that i don't think is explicitly necessary.

[nightshifft]

love this piece
but it hurts when your left behind waiting for next lie to be whispered from new lips
dark

[Jassy Melson]

I find the ending of this poem so intriguing. The "I" of the poem feels no self-pity or remorse because of being left alone by her or his lover. She or he simply awaits.

[Dark Muse]

I find the ending of this poem so intriguing. The "I" of the poem feels no self-pity or remorse because of being left alone by her or his lover. She or he simply awaits.

Yes exactly! The poem is not meant to express feelings of remorse or self-pity or despair for the situation in which they happen to be in, for it is about living in that moment, without regard for past or future. What has happened has been forgotten as soon as it is no longer the "now" and what will come matters not until it is here.

[MANICHAEAN]

Very sad Muse. The words so often trotted out; " Its better to have loved & and to have lost, than never to have loved at all" would have been meaningless in the context of this poem. You captured the hope without hope, the fatalism & the reality of a woman thinking "Its lies, but thats the most I can hope for." There are so many cases like that, and a lot of them married unfortunately.
Best wishes
M.

[Dark Muse]

Very sad Muse. The words so often trotted out; " Its better to have loved & and to have lost, than never to have loved at all" would have been meaningless in the context of this poem. You captured the hope without hope, the fatalism & the reality of a woman thinking "Its lies, but thats the most I can hope for." There are so many cases like that, and a lot of them married unfortunately.
Best wishes
M.

Thank you, though it is not necessarily meant to one that has resigned themselves to lies becasue they cannot hope for more, but rather one who prefers to be bathed in pretty words even if they are in sincere rather than have to hear a truth which may be unpleasent. If the lie is in fact more flattering than the truth, she would rather simply have the lie.

[MANICHAEAN]

Which makes it even sadder and perverse. Women can take men that are; weak, irresponsible, drunks whatever. But knowing they are being lied to is something a women's intuition can invariably pick up & which she finds unacceptable. Or perhaps I don't know as much about women as I thought!

[_Shannon_]

A Moment On Your Lips?

okay. :)

I used to be a lot like that. I really liked the poem.

[Dark Muse]

Which makes it even sadder and perverse. Women can take men that are; weak, irresponsible, drunks whatever. But knowing they are being lied to is something a women's intuition can invariably pick up & which she finds unacceptable. Or perhaps I don't know as much about women as I thought!

This poem is intended to offer a perspective that challenges what we may consider the "norm" or socially acceptable.

The woman in this poem is not meant to be looked upon as a victim, or helpless and defenseless, for her everything is about that single moment, and nothing beyond that moment matters.

She feels no pain for the life she lives, because for her out of sight truly is out of mind, and the moment her lover may leave her they cease to exist for her.

She may be fickle and vain, but she does not want to be burdened with truth, because she does not want anything which may distract from the pleasantness of that one single moment.

[Jassy Melson]

This poem reminds me of some of Sappho's poetry. There is an underlying sadness in many of Sappho's poems; but in some of her poems she writes there is a rejoicing, a celebration of the present moment, and how the present moment is the only reality we can grasp--all else is not illusion, but it is futility to try to grasp it. The present is the only reality.

[Dark Muse]

This poem reminds me of some of Sappho's poetry. There is an underlying sadness in many of Sappho's poems; but in some of her poems she writes there is a rejoicing, a celebration of the present moment, and how the present moment is the only reality we can grasp--all else is not illusion, but it is futility to try to grasp it. The present is the only reality.

I love Sappho!