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Delta40
11-28-2010, 05:56 PM
I shake the quilt upwards
to land parachute style across the bed
The edges cover one side framed with
half-read books and crumpled pages.
My hand plumps the pillows
then wields the pen like a sword poised
to bring me to my own end.
A sleepy journal contains half written words
which veer sharply downwards
when my heavy hand loses touch with wakefulness,
Thoughts meld into unmeaning and bundle under
a scrunched up pillow.
Fluffy teddys with ink stained fur
find their niche between
imagination and sleep.

PrinceMyshkin
11-28-2010, 06:05 PM
Although you may have been thinking of the journal


A sleepy journal contains half written words
which veers

it is "words" that govern the verb, being closer to it, so it ought to be "veer"

Apart from which what a terrific reproduction this is of an intimate moment from your day! I could practically read those "half written words"!

Jerrybaldy
11-28-2010, 07:11 PM
Fluffy teddys with ink stained fur
find their niche between
imagination and sleep.

great way to end this Delta.

Delta40
11-28-2010, 08:42 PM
lol. Thank you both.

Hawkman
11-28-2010, 10:34 PM
Enjooyed this, Delta. H

cogs
11-29-2010, 12:02 AM
the lightness of the linen is definitely echoed in the grace of this poem. i was hoping that the sword wouldn't produce a violent end. the ink stained teddy is a poem in itself.

hillwalker
11-29-2010, 06:38 AM
A portrait of the artist as a bedtime scribbler. And also, as yet another peep into your deep psyche it serves perhaps as a Rorschach Ink Blot Test?

H