Seasons

[zoolane]

Seasons

The time shift with subtle glaze on the horizon.
The white fluffy falls from the heavens'.
The froze clear water gentle flow beneath.
The world beginning to re flowering.
The youthful are born again
The full moon luster in all it glory.
The flare of warmest run itself through the air.
The sandy glow high in the sky.
The horizon is ignition with a golden breeze.
The current whisk through the gathering trees.

[hillwalker]

I liked this very much - until that last line where you use 'breeze' twice, and I'm guessing you put in 'harvest trees' in order to end on a rhyme but 'harvest' doesn't make very much sense in this context.

H

[zoolane]

I liked this very much - until that last line where you use 'breeze' twice, and I'm guessing you put in 'harvest trees' in order to end on a rhyme but 'harvest' doesn't make very much sense in this context.

H

Edit I hope not have to put in the season in a line.

[Haunted]

Beautifully drawn, full of hope and renewal.

[zoolane]

The Earth.

Oozing out of earth is smooth liquid.
Spilled through dirt to absorb back to earth core.
But silky fluid tickle the layers of skin of mother nature.
The chain reaction that has started things off.
The ice packs are faded.
Has the earth become a cooker.
We breath more chemicals then necessity.

[buddy bradley]

The Earth.

Oozing out of earth is smooth liquid.
Spilled through dirt to absorb back to earth core.
But silky fluid tickle the layers of skin of mother nature.
The chain reaction that has started things off.
The ice packs are faded.
Has the earth become a cooker.
We breath more chemicals then necessity.


Incredibly doomy, I like it.

[zoolane]

Thank you Bubby it was suppose been about centre of earth.