Broken in Misunderstanding

[Beautifull]

Thrown into the abyss of pain
Forced to quiet my cries
Trying to regain dignity
From where my heart lies

Found some ease from the pain
In self-inflicted harm and masturbation,
But only for a moment will I float in forgetful bliss
Before my mind's back in motion

Always wanting love,
Never wanting pain
Never really realizing,
They come hand in hand.

[hillwalker]

There's something here crying to get out, but perhaps you could work on it a little to focus more closely on the link between pain and love.

The main problem is that it is a little repeptitive - the word 'pain' appearing 4 times in just 3 lines. And the last line of verse 1 doesn't make much sense to me.

I also think the reader would be better able to engage with the poem if it was written from the first-person perspective - instead of referring to 'their' and 'they', make it 'my' and 'I'. Writing in your own voice fits better into such a personal poem than reporting events as some unidentified observer (even if none of it applies to your own private life), and also it would cause less confusion when again you refer to 'they' in the very last line.

H

[Beautifull]

Ah....great point...I think that would work. :) Thank you Hillwalker!

[Jerrybaldy]

Each of the three stanzas would stand alone and together they are even better. A sad and well written truism. I have arrived after Hill's comment and your revisit and I am sure it is improved.
cheers
JerryB

[Beautifull]

Why thank you Jerrybaldy! I'm appreciative and grateful for your comment. :)