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Jack of Hearts
11-21-2010, 05:48 PM
Late last night
they tell me they was sorry
a broke like me had tried to crawl this far
Sherbert dawn outside
I waste beside the trash cans
and pour them full with clanks from my guitar

The teasing irks my stomach, jeers I've faltered
as morning falls like lines fall into place
And more they mourn our boy had nearly had it
but morning's gone and the strongest lines have caved

Jerrybaldy
11-21-2010, 07:55 PM
Come outside Jack.

jajdude
11-22-2010, 02:36 AM
Why "a broke like me" -- not "bloke" ?

Just curious

Haunted
11-22-2010, 09:39 PM
I waste beside the trash cans
and pour them full with clanks from my guitar


as morning falls like lines fall into place


Great lines, cheers!