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_Shannon_
11-21-2010, 05:48 PM
For P on His 46th Birthday
11/21/2010

It was Fitzgerald, remember?
It was that mad love in the moonlight
and you thought of transference;
the possibility that CrazyLove could be yours.
Not for you, but your writing.

I bought you pajama pants and cozy socks,
And an Art Kane photo print, and the new
Library of America Wallace Stevens with its
smooth white pages and its sewn binding.
I threw pennies at your window, because
I couldn’t find any pebbles in the dark.
and asked if I could come up
to wish you a happy birthday.
You invited me in.

That next year I don’t remember,
except that I know our first son
was now born.
And that you weren’t writing anymore
and neither was I.
And you didn’t want that CrazyLove anymore,
and I couldn’t give it anyway.
The moon meant nothing anymore.
I could have thrown an anvil at your window.
And you wouldn’t have let me in.

Every other birthday since,
another child has been added to our brood,
and another set of gifts has been
relegated to the closet to collect dust.
Or allowed to be destroyed by the kids.
Unread books piling in boxes or on shelves.
Each year one last one more attempt
to return us to that night I stood
under your window when the whole world
was ours for the taking.
I didn’t know you never wanted that
CrazyLove for you.
For your writing once, but never you.

So this year I give you back that night.
I accept that you feel completely unworthy of love,
That you don’t want pennies or pebbles
or anvils thrown at your window,
That what you want more than anything is to be left alone.
This year I offer you the recognition
that you feel like a complete failure,
and there is nothing I can do to make you feel otherwise,
Since there is some deep shame buried
inaccessibly within you, which kept you
locked up in that room in the first place.

Finally, I give you my acceptance of you
as you are and not how I hope
you might be. Someday. Maybe.
I give you the present and future
free from the past.
I give you no expectations.
I relinquish you from any responsibility for me.
I trust that if you want me in
that room with you,
warm against the autumn darkness,
you will call me to you.
And the surety that I will come moonlight
in hand to begin and begin again.

_Shannon_
11-21-2010, 05:49 PM
I know it's not poetry greatness....but I needed someone to bear witness to this birth.

Thanks y'all for reading.

Jerrybaldy
11-21-2010, 07:53 PM
I love to read a truth spilt on a page.
JerryB

_Shannon_
11-21-2010, 07:56 PM
I don't know why, but that made me cry. Thanks, J.:) (That's not a sarcastic "Thanks"...it kinda sounded that way when I read it back to myself)

Jerrybaldy
11-21-2010, 08:07 PM
never sounded sarcastic to it's reader and thank you once again for your honesty which, with the given words, is the joy that makes some of us unable to quit returning here .

hillwalker
11-22-2010, 08:36 AM
This poem itself is probably as good a birthday present as any you could offer someone you love - it isn't literary greatness, but it's an honest display of affection, understanding and forgiveness for someone not meeting up to your expectations nor indeed perhaps their own, but still someone worth caring about.

H

PrinceMyshkin
11-22-2010, 10:13 AM
In the earlier recollections the details seemed to reach beyond themselves, as metaphors: e.g. the pennies might be seen as the low worth she felt that she and her love had for him; the anvil she imagined throwing barely concealed her anger under the comedy.

But, though I wouldn't have wanted that to continue to be the case, the later recollections became too overtly analytical to me, as if cerebration were replacing passion.

_Shannon_
11-22-2010, 10:21 AM
LOL! That's almost definitely true...and is reflective of the reality of the situation, Prince.


This poem itself is probably as good a birthday present as any you could offer someone you love - it isn't literary greatness, but it's an honest display of affection, understanding and forgiveness for someone not meeting up to your expectations nor indeed perhaps their own, but still someone worth caring about.

H

Thanks...yes...not my best poetic effort, for sure...but it took a LOT out of me to write, nonetheless.

YesNo
11-22-2010, 01:49 PM
It looks like the problem started with you throwing pennies at his window rather than waiting until he threw pennies at your window. But in the last stanza you realize this and are now willing to wait for him to call.

He might.

Scheherazade
11-22-2010, 01:57 PM
Due to its very personal nature, I don't want to comment on the content but I just want to say that I quite enjoyed reading it.

There are couple of capital letter inconsistencies and, I think, there is no need for "that" in the line:

that you will call me to you.


Apart from those, I think it reads rather well.

Happy Birthday, P!

_Shannon_
11-22-2010, 09:13 PM
My stupid word processor capitalises every fist line....grrrrr...

I think you're spot on about that "that"


It looks like the problem started with you throwing pennies at his window rather than waiting until he threw pennies at your window. But in the last stanza you realize this and are now willing to wait for him to call.

He might.

LOL! Yup...6 kids and 14 years later....

But there is also a knowing that he might never chuck some pebbles at my window. ANd that is okay to. I dunno. There is some big juju in just accepting someone as they are, even when who they are is often painful for us. At least there is for me.