Beauty of the mind

[Tinbit]

Calm feel
so serene,
Wave of the ocean
breeze of the wind,
Sunset and sunrise
so full of motion.
Its not all right, not wrong either
but more than just fine
An unrealistic realm......

[hillwalker]

The title is a worn-out cliche, as indeed are the first 6 lines - a list of nice images but hardly original. I imagine this sort of stuff has been written thousands of times in every language known to man due to the universal appeal of such imagery.

As for the last 3 lines; well line 7 is very weak and not particularly poetic, and as a whole they don't make very much sense. I would suggest rewriting the ending, and perhaps looking for something new to say about the ocean, the breeze or the passage of the sun.

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[Haunted]

There's a lot of redundancies:
calm and serene are basically the same;
waves of the ocean — why not just ocean waves?
breeze of the wind...aren't they pretty much the same thing?

The thing about poetry is it's a condensed experience, excess words weaken it.

To continue, there's really not much "motion" in sunset and sunrise, it's just changing light...unless you are in outer space orbiting, but then you wouldn't notice any breeze or wind on the surface of the planet...

The problem with these very common everyday images, it's hardly "unrealistic", so conceptually the poem doesn't really work. I think if you want to convey an unrealistic experience, you need to try a lot harder to come up with stuff that's truly mind blowing and fresh.