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brizig000
11-10-2010, 05:12 PM
Back at The Moon Drum Drawn where oliptical orifaces originate, Flooded with food and fluid Bobby deplored the devil dance. The yoke of attraction, the pairs, and the pantry......
Bose broadcasts high quality sound in a resturant like the inside of a speaker. The inner most tables where the bar is has a definate ring of walls glass and trumpet gold metal. The type of song heard might have a distortion with same songs sounds different than is without. The ringing vibrating gyrating outer walls. The inner thud. Stan picked up the ewer extracting its essence that numed the madness. Harmonious lyrical tunes engulfed his fancy. To escape reality he drank his chocolate shake.
Each seat was a booth against a wall with a port hole. When the seat was filled, a higher pitch would change the dementions of the sound as a flute or any wood or wind instrument would do. The same material made for a drum was what the roof was made of.
Kim, with her cymbal tray posed in her finesse, slid a slurryfull of Smash-n-mash forward to the Moors family. The moors were moody about their money managing ejecting high priced eaters. Embarking on a meal eloquent to their creed.
The chum was in the commercials making Steve feeling jealous until he went again to fullfill his jaunty glee.
"Tarry toe." Steve gestures ti kim. The cracks in the speacker began to develope. "Crash." The tray cymbal spins like a coin spun by the flick of ones fingers. "Steve Adams. Is that realy you?" Pillar styled erns were plucked from the center podium while an orchestra conductot waved his baton. From the bar at the kernal of the resturant. "Kim, Your order is up." Kim recouped.
"Kim, May I have my block please."
"Yes Steve just a moment." In a march Kim went to the register to tally the bill. Kim went in vehement glory when she saw the amount of the tip as she picked up the empty tankard of coffee and misclanious silver. Oppulance notes. A healthy dose coiled around a small stick imitating the pole with the British flag at the end. Bosted her folicle phase she floated around the rest of the evening in elegance.
The resturant is on the moon. Ever since the american flag was placed on the curface of the moon others that came broaght a flag from the country they represented.

Delta40
11-10-2010, 05:19 PM
lol. I just posted in the intro suggesting you post here!

brizig000
11-10-2010, 05:23 PM
I can not figure out this web site.

Delta40
11-10-2010, 05:24 PM
what do you need help with?

brizig000
11-10-2010, 05:27 PM
Nothing I only have about five minutes left in this session of computer use. I am fustrated thats all. Trying to hurry

hillwalker
11-10-2010, 05:27 PM
For all its originality, the amount of typos in this are very distracting and almost suggest they were inserted deliberately to mimic some futuristic version of the English language. If not, you really need to get yourself a dictionary or spell-checker to be taken seriously.

Some of the phrases also suggest English is not your first language. I had difficulty understanding the relevance of the words enclosed in brackets - stylistically they add little to the narrative and again are a distraction.

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Delta40
11-10-2010, 05:29 PM
Don't get too frustrated brizig. I hope to read more of your entries on Lit-Net soon

brizig000
11-10-2010, 05:31 PM
No. I am just stupid. I did draw prints for a house and did an owner builder as a carpenter. I should fix it up. Its just a journal entry

Delta40
11-10-2010, 05:34 PM
Sometimes, we are our harshest critic and it can take practice to absorb praise and accept critiques as a way to improve rather than insult your own unique writing.

brizig000
11-10-2010, 05:35 PM
So Politcally correct!

Delta40
11-10-2010, 05:39 PM
lol. You say PC, I say tomatoes....

brizig000
11-10-2010, 05:40 PM
Hey delta is it lit-net.org?

Delta40
11-10-2010, 05:43 PM
www.online-literature.com