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MANICHAEAN
11-08-2010, 01:51 AM
Chapter 1: Settling In:

Money, dark looks and a serpentine insurrection in his loins. Life was good and the Devil lay on his hotel bed, reviewing with some interest his current material, cosmetic and physical attributes. The dated colonial style fan revolved above him listlessly on the high ceiling & nearby, a mosquito sensed that discretion was the better part of valour and decided to forgo a bite and a drink.

With Miami Airport but a bad one hour flight memory ago, the Devil had ultimately touched base on the island and was refreshingly ensconced in the Terra Firma Hotel in Kingston, Jamaica.

None of the former US macho, bureaucratic hassle at Immigration here. The six foot plus, black windmill of an official with an infectious smile and a red stripe down his trousers, had politely enquired; “First time in Jamaica Mr Lucifer?”

“Yes first time” he responded warily, recollecting the need to choose carefully his words, to avoid any potential trap as previously encountered States side. “I’m sorry, I don’t have a visa,” he added more cautious still.

Another smile from the windmill. “No problem Man, me giv u tree weeks. Welcome to Jamaica.”

As if in slow motion, (for nothing moves fast in the Caribbean), he stamped the passport & handed it back.

“Thank you so much” said the Devil and picked up his bags. He was relieved and felt himself becoming more emotionally relaxed, even though the heat of the tropics was already clamming up his arm pits.

The Immigration official called after him; “Now you be careful of the sun man, it’s plenty hot out dere.”

“Thank you again, but in fact I’m quite used to the heat” he responded graciously.

Once at the hotel he reflected that, “These were his kind of people. Salt of the earth.” The taxi driver with the body odour had tried to drive him to Trenchtown to be robbed, the doorman at the hotel had offered him drugs, the reception staff had endeavoured to double swipe his credit card. And now the bell hop, whilst carrying his bags to the room, offered in succession, temptations, each of which he firmly refused.

“You want some sheep’s wool sir?” comprised starters from the young man.

“I’m not sure what exactly you had in mind, but thank you no” the Devil responded.

“How about a woman?”

“No not today thank you”

“A boy then?”

“Thank you no; I really just want a drink & an early night.”

In desperation the bell hop dealt his joker; “How about a coconut!”

The Devil threw him a look that froze his credentials and he left unsettled, partially soothed by a $20 note affectionately known locally as a “nanny”.

Lucifer showered, changed into a pleasing all black outfit of loose shirt, slacks & loafers & went to the poolside bar. The young barman with the gold tooth asked what he would like.

“Oh, give me one of your Jamaican specials” he replied.

“Wat mood you in sir and I knock em up real special” the barman replied, one eye indicating the sign up near the drinks shelves which read; “Tipping is not a town near Peking.”

“Actually I’m not feeling too bad at all” the Devil responded.

The barman combined in a long glass: 2 shots of Appleton rum, 1 shot of Drambuie, 3 shots of Black & White whiskey, crushed ice, bitters, orange juice, a bent straw & a slice of lime capped over the rim.

“Try dat Sir & let me no wat u tinks” the barman said gently, placing his creation on the bar as reverently as a priest handling a chalice.

The Devil sipped tentively. “Wicked” he responded. “Just as I like it.”

The bar man drifted off to serve an Afro American from Detroit in a pith helmet who seemed to be under the illusion that he was holidaying in Africa.

The bar radio was on and Lucifer listened to a voluble Jamaican woman, on what appeared to be a local phone-in.

“Em cum into me garden to steal me mango Mr Twaite” she addressed the languid and invariable unresponsive sounding presenter. “Me tell im, u tief man, u tief to steal me mango from me tree. And u know wat em say Mr Twaite?” Without waiting for a reply, she seemed not to draw breath but proceeded, “Em say It’s not your mango, its Gods mango! Lord hav mercy Mr Twaite the way tings are in Jamaica!”

The Devil smiled, whilst at the other end of the bar the Detroit black colonial master was being obscenely overcharged for the drinks. Nearby in a dark green bikini, his newly acquired mampi girlfriend was already planning that night to rob him blind after jumping his bones for an extended period to make him sleep.

“What a wonderful place this is.” The Devil thought. “So much evil, so much sin, so much corruption.”

He had already read in the glossy brochure how in the 17th century, then known as Port Royal, it had been dubbed “The Most Wicked City in the World” on account of it comprising the main pirate hub of the region.
“What a proud heritage it had” he thought.

There grew steadily, almost imperceptibly in his mind the possibility of acquiring a second home here, away from the office, a potential place for retirement, located ideally somewhere in a twilight zone between a maximum security prison and a Yardie drug lords ghetto. He would make enquiries of a local estate agent in the morning.

“Oh to peacefully slip into sleep each night to the sounds of sporadic gunfire in the street, the cries of domestic violence in adjoining properties & the sobs of the ground down poor & afflicted all around. Why could the States not have been more like this?”

Across the other side of the island in Montego Bay, a slight man with angular features, faded shirt and a beard was seated. He leaned forward & drew with his finger in the sand of Doctors Cave Beach.

“Where are the men that were chasing you?” he asked of the woman standing before him in tight jeans.

“Dem gone” she said.

He looked into her eyes and caressed her soul.

“Neither do I accuse you” he said. “Now go and get your dibs elsewhere.”

She paused, turned and staggered off awkwardly, her platform shoes totally at odds with the sand on which she trod.

The Nazarene rose slowly, and ignoring the hustlers and the higglers proceeded to the bus station.

He had business to take care of in Kingston.

hillwalker
11-08-2010, 07:20 AM
An intriguing read - both for the vivid sense of location and the religious sub-text. Brilliant.

H

Steven Hunley
11-08-2010, 12:17 PM
This was great! Such an enjoyable sense of place. One thought.

In the states here they have a symbol often put on car bumpers. It's a fish, and I found it was a symbol for Christians. Why not have the bearded man, since he's drawing in the sand anyway, etch the image of a fish?

It IS a great story and I know this isn't needed at all. But it's a thought. You may not want to give his identity away so freely.

Nathan Kelevra
11-08-2010, 03:32 PM
This was my favorite line.
I stop reading just so I could comment on the opening line.
"Money, dark looks and a serpentine insurrection in his loins."

that opening sentence made me want to make money and date foreign models.
I will achieve neither.

MANICHAEAN
11-09-2010, 12:11 AM
H. Your support, is as always so encouraging.

Steve. Too late. The cat (fish!) is out of the bag.

Nathan. Get past the first line & get into Chapter 2. Your aspirations regards money & dusky maidens from foreign climes is most commendable. A man after my own heart.

MANICHAEAN
11-09-2010, 12:17 AM
Chapter 2 The Meet Up.

The Nazarene entered the bar up by the stadium in east Kingston. The Devil recognised him immediately.

“Jesus Christ what are you doing here man. Long time no see. How’s your Dad?”

“He’s fine Nick, sends his regards & asked me to check you out in case you got into any mischief like. Anyway how the hell are you?”

“Thanks I’m fine.” He noted over Jesus’ shoulder a filmy, ghost like apparition. “I see you brought back up.”

“Oh” said Jesus “You know how it is. Don’t let Him bother you. Look upon Him more as a breath of fresh air.”

“I presume He’s tooled up?” enquired the Devil politely.

“Oh He’s more on the Admin side these day’s” said Jesus. “You know; information gathering, IT data base analysis, pie charts etc. Don’t be deceived though. He’s always been closer than the very air you breathe.”

The Holy Ghost said nothing, but was watchful.

Two blocks away in black BMW 7 Series limousines, with tinted windows and engines running, Gabriel and his host of enforcers waited. At the moment, they were not required.

A youth approached the lead car and enquired if the occupants, being presumably tourists, required any action.

“Young man” said Gabriel winding down the window, “Don’t bother me. Go away. At the rate you’re going, you won’t see thirty and you won’t get to heaven when you do go.

The peddler drifted off aimlessly. “Strange whities, in town today” he thought. “Heaven & Hell. Something must be going down.”

Steven Hunley
11-09-2010, 11:37 AM
This just gets better and better.

MANICHAEAN
11-09-2010, 01:41 PM
Tomorrow you get Chapter 3 & then thats it!
Glad you liked it as it was great fun writing it.
Best regards
M.

MANICHAEAN
11-10-2010, 03:37 AM
Chapter 3. As It Is.

The drinks lay between them.

At last Lucifer spoke.

“Can’t we reconcile our differences?”

“Too late Nick,” Jesus replied. “It’s gone too far. You know how it is, your pride and all that. Dad had no option but to kick you out. But He’s not vindictive.”

“But I’ve changed,” said Lucifer. “I’m more mature now. I like to think of myself now not as a devil but as a god. A god of man’s anger. There is a market for it you know.”

“A clever argument Nick but it won’t wash. I knew anger once myself” he said softly. “Like with the loan sharks down in the Temple you might remember. But I was the young “Son of Man” then. Now I’m older, more under control. “The Man of Man” you might say. You’d better accept it Nick, the two families remain separated and at the moment you are on Our turf.”

The apparition appeared closer now at the Nazarene’s shoulder. The Devil shuddered inwardly. It was like a death reborn, a younger Jesus. A Jesus before the Judas kiss, before the pain that had been His fate.

Lucifer knew he had lost.

Again.

A dark flush of the very qualities he admired so much in other evil men transfixed his face. Frustration as a precursor to anger & then the brooding, dense hate.

“Scripture is wrong,” he thought bitterly. “The foxes’ have their lairs but the Son of Man hath nowhere but to lay His head. Not so now! He was the one being moved on remorselessly.” The shallowness of the respect he was being given hit hard.

“No options, only a return to the drabness of Hades. The dream of a second home in Jamaica no longer on.”

Out in the Blue Mountains to the east of Kingston, for no apparent reason, a man embraced his eldest son.

“What’s that for Dad?” he said.

“Don’t ask, accept” the father replied. “I just felt like it.”

He looked up into the bright blue eternity of a Jamaican heaven and the air was now clean.

“I can see clearly now the rain has gone.”
“I can see all obstacles in my way.”
“Hurry the dark clouds that pass me by.”
“It’s going to be a bright, bright sun shining day.”
“It’s going to be a bright, bright sun shining day.”

(Song extract compliments of the late Jimmy Cliff.)

Hawkman
11-10-2010, 04:51 AM
Very enjoyable this little caribean tale. just what I needed first thing in the morning :D

Live and be well, H

MANICHAEAN
11-10-2010, 08:50 AM
Even better H if you go there.

The first time I went to Jamaica was from a bitterly cold November in the UK.

The place has a special magic, even if a section of the population come across as lovable rogues descended from Captain Morgan!

Regards
M.