Title 'Untitled'

[Jerrybaldy]

I have felt it all before, I feel
and yet my frantic feet
keep spinning
this bloody wheel.

I think I have run out of faces.
Each time I see a new one
I swear I have seen it before.

I have felt at times
that my feelings feel too real,
but what is real in a metaphor
of a hamster in its wheel?

This word here
follows that one,
here is another,
I'm done.

[tailor STATELY]

Clever.

[hillwalker]

A portrait of someone suffering Alzheimers, or an obsessive poet, masquerading as a character in 'Groundhog Day'?? Who knows?

I like the treadmill analogy - and its brevity makes it more thought-provoking than if you had continued writing.

H

[Haunted]

Been there done that? This is a great line: I think I have ran out of faces

[Delta40]

I can see you rolling round the office in a hamster ball, Jerry. Has an Ecclesiastical sound. There is nothing new under the sun....

[PrinceMyshkin]

I love this for the kookiness of it - and the sense of some real provocation beneath the humorous surface! But

would you PLEASE change "I think I have ran"

'ran" to "run"?

[Jerrybaldy]

thanks all
I am worried by hill's comment as I keep meeting new people with faces I have seen before. My theory is there are only so many flavours. haunted captured it. The poem tried to show the desparation of trying to get that across. Will change ran to run (Prince) and gerbil to hamster (Delta). Thanks for your one word review Tailor. I liked the one you chose.
cheers peeps
Jerry

[Delta40]

The fact that by middle age you have created a really comprehensive filing system that is getting packed to the rafters and is in need of a de-clutter, I am not surprised...

[Lumiere]

The General Fatigue of Everything. Good poem. Just the right dosage of bitterness!