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kelby_lake
10-27-2010, 01:52 PM
EDITED- THE BITS AT THE END WERE NOTES I'D ACCIDENTALLY COPY-PASTED


Not at first sight, nor with a dribbèd° shot,
Love gave the wound which while I breathe will bleed:
But known worth did in mine° of time proceed,
Till by degrees it had full conquest got.

Silas Thorne
10-27-2010, 03:49 PM
It looks like it, but...
Should there be a comma after 'random'? That 'random' in the first line seems to connect more with 'shot' than with 'Love' in the second line. If not, there seems to be enjambment.
I'm actually not sure what all the hollow circles are.:eek:

kelby_lake
10-27-2010, 04:05 PM
It looks like it, but...
Should there be a comma after 'random'? That 'random' in the first line seems to connect more with 'shot' than with 'Love' in the second line. If not, there seems to be enjambment.
I'm actually not sure what all the hollow circles are.:eek:

I accidentally copied the footnotes with it. The circles denote the point at where there's a definition (so dribbed= random).

Taken off all the definitions now. It looks like it's end-stopped, doesn't it?

Silas Thorne
10-27-2010, 04:09 PM
Yes these lines do, according to my limited knowledge, though some other lines in this sonnet run on.
(Just popped into 'Astrophel and Stella' for a read :))