Poems

[zoolane]

The 2 way door.

The door is two ways swing.
1st way is open to a place.
To place of serene peace.
With paste colours to calm the nerves.

2nd way is to lead to.
The back into chaos.
With vivid colours to unnerve you.
The 2nd place is hell on earth.

[zoolane]

The Wind.

The wind is sailing across the earth.
The wind is howl at earth.
The wind is sending a messages to you.
The wind as it own secret code.
If you listen closely, you will surely hear it.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I see in both of these that your eyes or your spirit are wandering, thinking of other places, other possibilities.

[Delta40]

I think you need to work on the 2 way door - mainly because its a good concept - people make their choice!

The wind is rather good.

[Jerrybaldy]

Hi zoo
hope you are well. I enjoyed the 2 way door.
I have noticed a shortening in your poetry and as a purely personal point of view, I have always enjoyed your longer peices with a story to tell within.
cheers
Jerry

[Maryd.]

Hey Zoo, I like The Wind, but I love the Two Way Door. Well done dear.
xo

[hillwalker]

I think some of these shorter pieces are just as powerful because you allow the reader breathing space to come up with their own conclusions.

The 2-way door is a simple illustration of how thin the divide sometimes can be between all that is good and all that is bad - and I think it is quite effective as it stands.

The wind is perhaps a little more difficult to get to grips with because it needs the reader to suspend a certain amount of belief to accept what you have written
- to some of us the wind is just the wind. To the person in your poem it is something else, but we don't get to meet that person nor hear what the wind might be saying to him/her.

H

[zoolane]

Thank you all your comments, 2 way doors I think re do or maybe shorten peice on concept.

The Message.

Words are traveling on the open breeze.
Letters get muddle up.
The message become confused and delayed.

The breeze is still carry it afar.
Across all lands.
In very language, for every person.
It up to you as a individual.
To decide what it said to you.

[zoolane]

The Breath.

I know it is true.
That life is dawn again.
When I open my eyes.
Chores and routine are still here.

I wish the housework.
Would just go away.
I could do as I please.

[zoolane]

The Pen.

I have pen in my hand.
Shall I written today?
Dark and sinister.
Is what I end up write about.

Murder or devil comes out to play.
In the words I write.
It come naturally to me as clean my teeth.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Thank you for "The Message," "The Breath" and "The Pen."

[zoolane]

Thank you Prince. They come bit more light in content. I know still semi dark.

[Delta40]

The last two made me smile

horror and dark thoughts come to you as natural as cleaning your teeth.....lol.

I wish I could stay in bed and not face work as well.

[hillwalker]

I think the 'Pen' stands out from the recent batch - almost a witty look at possession, especially the closing line that illustrates how the dark side has taken over your life. Is it you? Or is it the pen that wrote this?

H

[zoolane]

Pondering

Here I am pondering what to next?
My mind wonder all direction.
With glimpse of poetry or story.

Really I suppose by reading ''Shakespeare''.
60 pages in to the book.
Every time I pick in up and trying reading.
I fell a sleep.

[Haunted]

Such a cute and honest poem! I love the spontaneity.

[zoolane]

The Voice.


The voice within my head.
Are speak to me in sleep and went I am wake.
Reeling from paranoid phrases.
That are scared me.
The point of no return is closeness it.

The voice is loudest from everything else.
I put cotton wool in my ears.
It does not work the voice still here.
I am panic with what voice is going to make me do.

[zoolane]

Visit.

I am going to be visiting the capital city soon.
I will be near the site of pain and emotional upheaval.
I want to go to the site.
I know people will think I am mad.
The pain will be in me forever.
I have try in past to numb pain.
With no effect on it.
I feel that I must go.
But will help or destroys me?

[Jerrybaldy]

Hi Zoo
the voice sounded like schizophrenia or maybe the voice we all have questioning every little thing we do...
Visit made me think of 9/11.
best wishes
Jerry

[zoolane]

The Tones

I listen to smooth tones of my dearest.
The soft whisper get loud.
Annoying tone is here now.
Screaming at me.

The velvet sorry tone has come to ear.
I am red angry tone with why should I?
I am purple with whatever you said tone.

[zoolane]

I am condemnation to a chamber.
I said ''was not I
Who did these deed''.
They said ''otherwise''.

I have prayer to very gods for forgiveness.
In hope that one will hear my plead.
Not one heard my crying.

The time has come.
I am led to wooden block.
I stand up straight.

The rope is finally placed round my neck
I swing by the neck.

[zoolane]

The Image

I wish the bang would stop.
My walls are shaky.
The door rattle in it frame.
I try to hide under the covers.

Them with nightly activities.
Surely there other rooms in the house.
As I am half wake.
I going to loo.
There semi-naked figure make ran for it.
I feel sick with that image.

[zoolane]

Such a cute and honest poem! I love the spontaneity.

Thank you but I wish could stay wake to reading ''Shakespeare''.


Hi Zoo
the voice sounded like schizophrenia or maybe the voice we all have questioning every little thing we do...
Visit made me think of 9/11.
best wishes
Jerry

The Voice was suppose sound like that and the visit bit more personal.

[zoolane]

The last two made me smile

horror and dark thoughts come to you as natural as cleaning your teeth.....lol.

I wish I could stay in bed and not face work as well.


I think the 'Pen' stands out from the recent batch - almost a witty look at possession, especially the closing line that illustrates how the dark side has taken over your life. Is it you? Or is it the pen that wrote this?

H

Thank you both for comments and teeth line I though sound good with poem.
H my own fair fingers type it lol honest.