Intermezzo

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Intermezzo


Inspired by a poem by Lamar Cole
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Moon busied above, kissed the stars to bed

As cool breeze sighed, shivered upon my spine

My love's moon-eyes flashed of aquamarine

I breathed deep my love in the silver light
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Toes to toes caressed by impish ebb tides

Her lips tasted as sweet, as sweet a rose

The sea becalmed as betide we embraced

Old Moon blushed with knowing averted gaze
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10/15/2010

[Vignette]

What lovely imagery this conjures up in my mind! And the idea of the moon blushing with averted gaze is delightful. :-)

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Thank you for your kind comments.

LOL. I just noticed I left "Toes to toes"; edited to "Toe to toe" in my final version on my web page. (Sigh. It's too late to edit above it seems).

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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[MorpheusSandman]

It's a really charming, elegant little piece. It kinda reminds me of the evocative simplicity of Robert Burns... maybe it was the "as sweet as a rose" line.

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Thank you MorpheusSandman for your kind comment. An influence indeed, albeit ever so humbly. To stand on the shoulders of great poets ~ inspired and aspiring is a modern poet's lot.

From wikipedia: some interesting insights on the song/poem "A Red Red Rose" (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/A_Red,_Red_Rose) and a quote I found interesting:
When asked for the source of his greatest creative inspiration, American singer songwriter Bob Dylan selected Burns' 1794 song A Red, Red Rose, as the lyrics that have had the biggest effect on his life.

The poem:

A Red Red Rose - a poem by Robert Burns

O my Luve's like a red, red rose
That's newly sprung in June;
O my Luve's like the melodie
That's sweetly played in tune.

As fair art thou, my bonnie lass,
So deep in luve am I;
And I will luve thee still, my dear,
Till a' the seas gang dry:

Till a' the seas gang dry, my dear,
And the rocks melt wi' the sun;
I will luve thee still, my dear,
While the sands o' life shall run.

And fare thee weel, my only Luve,
And fare thee weel awhile!
And I will come again, my Luve,
Tho' it ware ten thousand mile.

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[Bar22do]

It really is delicate and so pleasingly graceful in form and tone! Thanks for sharing this one (and the noble lineage which it continues!)
Best from Bar

[qimissung]

Ah young love. This is a sweet reminder of the other joys of springtime. I also love the last line.

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Thank you Bar22do

and

Thank you qimissung

for your kind comments.

I had hoped for a lightness and playfulness in this poem.

Sincerely,
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[IceM]

This is a beautiful image. Absolute success in the sensationalist purpose. I can totally remember the goosebumps I felt when I kissed my girlfriend, very literally under the almost exact scenario described here.

It's a beautiful image. I'm not sure if there's more to interpret than a sexy, romantic moment, but if there is, the sensation of your image and the excellent portrayal is enough for me.

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Thank you IceM.

Just as you noted, young love on the California shores. Something personal for me as well. I chose "Intermezzo" as the title because young love can be such a short magical moment between two major themes in life, generally: Growing up, learning values, education, and so on - anchored by parents; and then the time away on one's own, starting a family, career, further education, et al.

I carefully chose the word "betide" because of its closeness to the word 'tide' of course, and I liked the choice of coupling it with "becalmed" ~ as if even time stood still; and in some references "betide" is denoted as something happening especially as if by fate.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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