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alcala0001
10-14-2010, 05:17 PM
She sent me a picture today. I can't go more than a few minutes without sneaking a peek at it. She claims she just pointed and clicked it, but it's perfect - a renaissance master would give his right hand to paint her in oils. It's hard to tell if she is really the most gorgeous thing in the world, or if it just seems like it to me. Other pictures she has sent me are much more revealing, but this picture, her dark shiny hair spilling around her as she lays on a dark blue satin pillow, pouting at me with those full, pink lips, is by far my favorite. Her eyes - I can never quite make out what color they are. Sometimes they look pale blue-grey, but here they look like a watery hazel. She is flawless. I wonder if she ever gets tired of me telling her how perfect and beautiful she is to me. Do I smother her? God I hope not.

I enjoy the few minutes (sometimes hours) that I get to chat with her each day. On days that I don't talk to her, it feels like there's something missing. In real life she would never be seen with somebody like me. How could she? I'm just an overweight guy with nothing but a personality to offer up, and she's more. Like an angel. I haven't felt like this in years; the butterflies in my stomach, that tingle up my spine and the giddy grin that makes my face hurt when we chat. I know it's just a fantasy. Two people enjoying each other over the internet - harmless really. But sometimes it feels like it should be more, even though I know full well it won't be. Can't be. Distance, logistics and the laws of the universe would prevent us from ever meeting. But I still ache for her.

There is no guilt on my end. She has filled my head for months, and I'm good with it. She makes me want to be a better person - maybe somebody that would deserve her. I have to keep this secret, and I gladly do; the thrill of our secret online trysts adds to the excitement. My internet indescretions are easy enough to hide. For now. This sort of thing always finds a way to come out - be it an internet window left carelessly open or an email sent to a wrong address... I'll deal with that when it happens. For now I only think of her. I hear the garage door. I have just enough time to stare into her beautiful face one more time and cover my tracks before the door swings open and I greet my wife with a smile that belongs to somebody else.

hillwalker
10-14-2010, 05:42 PM
The line 'I enjoy the few minutes (sometimes hours) that I get to chat with her each day.' gives such an accurate insight into the mindset of someone obsessed with such a doomed relationship; where time no longer has meaning.

Very wry and amusing, and perfectly balanced between self-deprecation and delusion.

H

MANICHAEAN
10-14-2010, 10:24 PM
Alcala0001.As is your trademark, a very enjoyable piece.
Some writers use the beginning of a story to grab the readers attention. You stand it on its head & the punch is at the other end.
You captured well the sad, and almost perverse relationship of the overweight guy grasping secondhand for the attention of today's image of a desirable woman.
The captured "butterfly" held delicately cupped in the hollow of two hands came to mind, even before your use of the word in a different context.
All the ingredients were there: fantasy & reality, infatuation, deceit & betrayal.

Keep them coming.

One related subject you might be interested in. There is a spate of scams currently popular in Ghana where such men as the character in your story are enticed onto chat lines by supposedly desirable young ladies, who are in fact men also. So well do these males execute a consumate performance in playing a woman that it demands a kind of wry smile and negative respect!

alcala0001
10-15-2010, 02:48 AM
You are most gracious Manichaean! And no, I don't believe she is an African scam artist - but I will most certainly confront her about it when next we chat. LOL

loki456
10-15-2010, 04:31 AM
haha don't laugh, I chat with my characters all the time! is that wrong? psychotic perhaps? meh psychosis is where it's at... these mental health patients have it worked out.. what's truly normal anyways right?

that's a joke btw, although, I do picture myself and what it would be like to meet one of my characters. considering most of the stuff I write is either Lovecraftian horror, or more notably psycho thrillers - I dare say I wouldn't survive long at all. I'm a delicate flower when it comes to confrontation ;) (for people who know me, that's a joke).

and I would think that if Manichaean ever met his 'satan', he would have to only dazzle him with exuberant literary prose, a nonchalant retort suggesting the following.. 'meh who are you again? and the flash of a bright shiny badge and he wouldn't have too many problems.

Delta40
10-15-2010, 06:04 AM
ahh. Somebody had to put it out there and who better than a hand such as yours! Slap that character guy to the ground now!

Ely_Massacre
10-15-2010, 10:31 AM
"I have just enough time to stare into her beautiful face one more time and cover my tracks before the door swings open and I greet my wife with a smile that belongs to somebody else."

Totally dig this line, sir. Really loving this sentence. This entire piece was short and sweet, then switches to... to immorality. The sudden transition was a bit too fast for me, but you concluded nicely. Thumbs up. =D

alcala0001
10-15-2010, 12:16 PM
Thank you! Glad I could shock somebody with the last name 'Massacre'. I am a fan of the surprise ending, as is evidenced in many of my pieces. And yes, immorality is one of my specialties. lol