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nightshifft
10-13-2010, 10:15 PM
spell bound

at the stroke of twelve the flame flares
reflecting off naked flesh as she dances
naked by the fires light she dances in the night
body swaying to the tempo of earths heavy beat
her voice low chanting deep in trance
dark eyes heavy lidded seeking to
see into another place
intense pleasure written on her face
casting her spell upon the smoke
carried away to seek her fate
moon mother looks down upon her daughter
guiding her spell bound endeavor
soft moans as she weaves her magic
through midnight air
seductive heat laced with orgasmic power
as her hips sway sweat glistens on
heavy lust filled breast
her own flame burns deep by the fire light
hot erotic magic cast spell bound through the night
lust driven memories of her lover spinning through
both time and space
to find him four thousand years hence where that first kiss of coital bliss
under moon lit fields sealed their fate
forming a love stronger than times immortal race
through the past into their future
young man starts awake with erotic wonder
still feeling her lust filled body
where it pressed against his
only the fading memory of her face in his mind
as they meet once more
spell bound
to rendezvous throughout time

dark

Delta40
10-13-2010, 10:46 PM
I really like the hazy enchantment of this poem. It has a almost erotic quality as one loses themself to the flames of night magic. may I suggest you review some of the repetitive terms in the poem to give it the spellbound level it so deserves.

L2 & L3 both use the term naked.
L4 & L6 both use the term heavy and at L17
L12 & L19 & L31 all use spell bound
L17 & L27 both use lust

Seachriya
10-13-2010, 11:01 PM
This has a great concept within the poem. It's also very alluring and hypnotic. People will loose against their fantasy and lust.