Burning

[Delta40]

No
Flame
In the
Night
l
My light doth taper
Like a waning glow
Thy pitch of gloom
Be a haunted vale
Thy foiled passion
A vanquished gypsy
Flickering torch of lustre
Oh that your wick would blaze!

[PrinceMyshkin]

I cannot help but read a phallic allusion in that last line (implicit even earlier) but oh, the cold heat of this! Good poem.

[hillwalker]

I love this poem for its economy and its lyrical language - and you draw a fair candle also.

[Delta40]

Hill - I'm so glad you can see its a candle!

Prince - I did not think about the phallic allusions - but you're right. They must have appeared unconciously....

[Jerrybaldy]

Clever clogs :P :D
JerryB

[Delta40]

thank you

[Haunted]

I'm not a fan of archaic language but I love it here, it looks so right in candlelight ;)

[Maryd.]

Oh Delta, you created a masterpiece. Mwah girlie.

[Delta40]

Thanks Haunted and Maryd.

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed also. An economy of expression and a candle, albeit on the wane, to read by (probably why I had to squint to read the orange print).


Thy foiled passion
A vanquished gypsy - Delightful !

Well done.

[Delta40]

Thank you tailor. I'm mixed up on the thou, thy and thee but I didn't think too much here.

[darkprince]

@delta40 : honestly, i'm still trying to understand this poem...but tht candle figure is such a cool idea..gud work !

[Delta40]

Thank you Dark Prince. I think the meaning is open to interpretation.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Prince - I did not think about the phallic allusions - but you're right. They must have appeared unconciously....

Yes, those unconscious phalluses and their gender equivalents are the very devil, but at least they constitute safe sex!

[Delta40]

I'm so envious..... :-)