If there's something I want to say to you

[angliholic]

If this is the last picture I paint,
I won't paint a gorgeous bouquet but your rosy cheeks
on the canvas of my heart.

If this is the last poem I write,
I won't praise red rubies but your cherry lips
on the paper of a maple leaf.

If there's something I want to say to you,
it's not how much I love you,
but "how are you
on this cool late autumn morning?"

[tailor STATELY]

If this is the last
poem I ever read
I will be content
in the knowledge
of the deftness
you wield so well
in the poet's art

Sincerely,
tailor STATELY

[PrinceMyshkin]

I love the unexpected humility of that last verse! So true a testament of your undemanding love.

[Scheherazade]

Angli,

I quite enjoy the sentiments you express in your poems but, after reading a few, I cannot help feeling that they are a little too formulaic -almost predictable- in their delivery.

Considering your poetic prowess, as a dedicated reader, I think I would really like you to try something different, a little more risky and adventurous in your poetry.

Maybe even expressing the same feelings in a less cliche-ridden vocabulary.

As it is, this poem (the first two stanzas particularly) reminds me of a Hallmark card at its best.

[Lumiere]

I love the last stanza.

[Lokasenna]

Maybe even expressing the same feelings in a less cliche-ridden vocabulary.

As it is, this poem (the first two stanzas particularly) reminds me of a Hallmark card at its best.

Perhaps that's the point, Sher? That was certainly how I read the poem - that last stanza, with its quiet dignity, seems to defeat the 'hallmark' quality of the first two stanzas. It is, I think, an ironic (though in a sincere way) comment on the boutiful protestations of love one finds in greeting cards, which are defeated by the quiet and realistic mode of actual human love in that last stanza.

It is, as I have intimated, a very dignified poem. I don't know if that is what you intended when you wrote it, but that is certainly how it affected me.

[Scheherazade]

Perhaps that's the point, Sher? Having read more or less all of Angli's poetry available on the Forum, I am not sure, Loka.

However, as in everything else, we all have our preferences in poetry too; it is all right not to (dis)like what someone else does.

:)

[GEETASHREE]

Angli, you have stolen my heart again with this serene poem

[aliengirl]

I simply loved the last stanza. It was an unexpected turn of thoughts.

[adityasam]

Superb. Everything was nice. The twist in the last stanza caught me surprised. Good poem on the whole.

Regards

[Jerrybaldy]

I can understand some of the comments above but I must say I have come to understand what I will get when I click on your latest posting and it is like visiting an old friend. In a good way.
cheers
JerryB