Amateurish Poem

[dafydd manton]

Amateurish Poem


We, the great unskilled, are challenged.
Those who resent our honesty
Have spoken.
Our skill is not their skill,
Our education not on a par with theirs.
We do not claim elitism,
We claim to merely enjoy.
We like each other,
Loves had grown here,
Friendships across the entire world
Have burgeoned.
We understand more of humanity
But less of the snobbery
That surrounds literature,
Hi-Fi, wine,
And pretension.
We have commited,
We undesirable few,
The untimated solecisms of pleasure,
Of laughing
And enjoying
Whilst the wise stand by,
Sneering at our amateurism.
We stand comdemned.
And I for one
An unashamed.
Now, regrettably,
Merely silent

[Maryd.]

Hahahaha...
Way to go Davie...

[Delta40]

Great poem. the structure is rather loose of course and you might never rise higher than a mediocre poet but that aside, the solidarity of your class is heard loud and clear in this attempt.

(giggle, I love your stuff 'awesome dude!') xxx

[zoolane]

Great poem. the structure is rather loose of course and you might never rise higher than a mediocre poet but that aside, the solidarity of your class is heard loud and clear in this attempt.

(giggle, I love your stuff 'awesome dude!') xxx


Oh no I am going fly way and tell off you and Dafy.

[Maryd.]

Fly Zoo.. Fly, but don't forget to return... Hahaha

[Skia]

What a pissa Daf! Totally mint let me tell ya! I dunna fink it's Mediocre at all! Well, from an Ameteur like me - why would ya take my feedback anyway!!

and :lol: ... like Maryd said- Fly Zoo!

[Haunted]

It resonates, Dafy. Now I'll retreat to my little hole....

[aliengirl]

Great Poem!
But who am I to say so. Not a poet at all. An amateur reader should be silent but Daffy is right -
"We understand more of humanity
But less of the snobbery"

Should I come back?

[dafydd manton]

Yes.....and restore some faith in human nature, that seems to have taken a battering in the past few days........ Thanks, Aliengirl.

[Jerrybaldy]

The long (ish) history of litnet tells us none of us will be here for long. Maybe some of us are worthy of publication, maybe not. Is modern poetry bought in any numbers anyway? Considering the time I spend on here I am happy to have friends I will never meet writing in individual styles that I enjoy. The diversity from the simple to the complex and all between, is what makes it for me. If there are sides, I only hope neither side ever wins.

[DieterM]

Dafy, and zoo, I just read your poems which reacted to the current discussion on here. Read them with mucho gusto, I must say. I didn't want to participate in the rather sterile discussion whether auntie was wrong or right because, well, she has as much right as anyone on here to express what and how she feels. But I'm really rather with you two, dafy and zoo, even if I have very much appreciated Auntie's lengthy critique of my New Poems thread. She wasn't tender, she was a bit like an English-Grammer-teacher but she made me ponder and mull over her words. Something I've always liked.
What I really really love about your two poems, dafy and zoo, is that you answer with the genuine weapon of this place: with poetry. I know I don't comment very often on the poetry of others because my job keeps me very busy, alas. I don't think I have to apologize for that. Neither would I want anybody on here to apologize for his or her work or his/her opinion. This said, I really enjoy the warmth and friendship I normally feel in this forum. I'd be more than sad if that disappeared. I'd miss you all too much, dafy, angli, zoo, haunted, hill, auntie, and sorry for those I haven't mentionned for lack of place... Best to all of you.

[zoolane]

Dafy, and zoo, I just read your poems which reacted to the current discussion on here. Read them with mucho gusto, I must say. I didn't want to participate in the rather sterile discussion whether auntie was wrong or right because, well, she has as much right as anyone on here to express what and how she feels. But I'm really rather with you two, dafy and zoo, even if I have very much appreciated Auntie's lengthy critique of my New Poems thread. She wasn't tender, she was a bit like an English-Grammer-teacher but she made me ponder and mull over her words. Something I've always liked.
What I really really love about your two poems, dafy and zoo, is that you answer with the genuine weapon of this place: with poetry. I know I don't comment very often on the poetry of others because my job keeps me very busy, alas. I don't think I have to apologize for that. Neither would I want anybody on here to apologize for his or her work or his/her opinion. This said, I really enjoy the warmth and friendship I normally feel in this forum. I'd be more than sad if that disappeared. I'd miss you all too much, dafy, angli, zoo, haunted, hill, auntie, and sorry for those I haven't mentionned for lack of place... Best to all of you.


Hi Diet,
Thank you very for kind words about my poems, we miss you to Diet because for your work. Zoo

[Haunted]

Neither would I want anybody on here to apologize for his or her work or his/her opinion. This said, I really enjoy the warmth and friendship I normally feel in this forum. I'd be more than sad if that disappeared. I'd miss you all too much, dafy, angli, zoo, haunted, hill, auntie, and sorry for those I haven't mentionned for lack of place... Best to all of you.

Dieter, I'm so honored you mentioned me, it's this sense of community that I find stimulating, it revived my passion in writing again.

Dafy thanks for this poem, despite the reason behind for writing it, I think it's brought us together closer and appreciate each other even more.

[hack]

Not silent for long, I hope.

[jajdude]

Nice poem.

Is this correct: "The untimated solecisms of pleasure"

Not familiar with "untimated"

[PrinceMyshkin]

You may be an "amateur poet" but you're a real pro when it comes to being yourself! (Does it pay well, though?)