The Crack.

[zoolane]

The Crack

The crack opens my heart,
Azure, tangerine liquid is draining away.
Slow I get breathless and limp.
As my life is flash before.

The darkness comes closer.
With shadowed figure hide within.
Shadow with a white face.
I know who it is.
It is death, has for me.

[hillwalker]

The crack of doom - I like the way you have imagined all the colours draining out of your heart.

H

[zoolane]

I scold thee with my tongue.
I mark thee with my cane.
I will bound thee with my rope.
I will lay thee down.

I will enrage thee with my angry.
I will vicious kiss thee.
I will careless crest thee body.
I will be release and you stay bound.

[dafydd manton]

Thee - superb, just superb, probably one of your best ever, and that says a lot!!!!!!!!

[zoolane]

Thee - superb, just superb, probably one of your best ever, and that says a lot!!!!!!!!


Thee was made on bus trip to hospital, 1 half of my brain was reading a book by Dean Kootnz and other try figure things out what words, lines when in this 2 verses poem.

Thank you Dafy

[zoolane]

Proud?

If you could see me now.
Would you be proud of me?
Would you be disgrace of what I come?

If you could see me now.
The choices I have made.
Would agree or disagree with them.

Would still love me?
Like I still love you.
Even so you have been go for so long.

[hillwalker]

Proud - sounds like its a poem based on someone you cared about and cared about you. They still matter to you and you express yourself with such honest uncertainty here that I'm sure they are proud of you. And I hope you're proud of yourself.

There's a lot of restraint in this that shows how much you are maturing as a writer.

H

[zoolane]

Thank you for comment H, aleast growing in one shape or form.

Wishing my ears would stop bloody burn.

[zoolane]

As I float in mid air.
I can see you cause trouble.
with your hands on her hips.
Your sibling point the finger at you.

The voices are getting loud ed.
Another sibling join in.
Trying to calm things down.

I turn to my body, sent you all to bed.

[Skia]

Mother point of view = sounds like my family home !

[Jerrybaldy]

tangerine liquid for some reason, really struck me. You are flowing more than Angs flowers lately :)

[dafydd manton]

Zoo,you are making many of us think very hard about life - don't stop, whatever you do!!! Never!

[zoolane]

tangerine liquid for some reason, really struck me. You are flowing more than Angs flowers lately :)

Thank you Jerry, I think might soft side try to get out maybe?



Mother point of view = sounds like my family home !

Well Skia, I got sick of constent to and fro between all 3 girls.


Zoo,you are making many of us think very hard about life - don't stop, whatever you do!!! Never!

Thank you Dafy I will try not to, best not make promise just yet. lol

[zoolane]

Me

Here I am growing in statue.
My brain is going burst with knowledge.
Waiting to show world what I can do.

I uses my skill with words.
Words are everywhere.
Words are in bedded in my being for forever.

[Delta40]

Zoo art thou a poet
thou whet our souls
with smatterings
of words

[zoolane]

Zoo art thou a poet
thou whet our souls
with smatterings
of words

thank you, Delta that sweet little poem special with me in. WOW I am famous again. lol

[Delta40]

call it a capful of fame to wash your hair in!

[Haunted]

great going zoo! Keep that azure, tangerine liquid flowing.

[zoolane]

I wish was star.
In the night sky.
Drift through the atomshpere.
Wait for my time shoot across night sky.

[zoolane]

The Fantasy

As I laid here on shrub.
I am gaze up into tall trees,
I close my eyes dream my dream.
With splendor colours in mind.

Flickers a path to my fantasy world.
I merge myself into my world for colours.
In hope that my true reality with disappear in thin air.

[zoolane]

The Petal

Petal is a fragile thing.
Soft to the touch.
Gentle breeze shake it slightly.
A drop of rain slip down smooth skin.

[Delta40]

The Fantasy

As I laid here on shrub.
I am gaze up into tall trees,
I close my eyes dream my dream.
With splendor colours in mind.

Flickers a path to my fantasy world.
I merge myself into my world for colours.
In hope that my true reality with disappear in thin air.

I like this one because once again your unique use of words weave a wonderful tangled fantasy

[zoolane]

I like this one because once again your unique use of words weave a wonderful tangled fantasy

Thank you try explore my more subtle, gentle side


The Quiet.

Quiet as mouse I will be.
You will hear sound out of me.
Alone in my mouse hole is there find me.
Quiet as I can be

I am a mouse try stay alive.
From all poison you put down.
I still here in my hole.
Quiet as can be.

[Delta40]

Thank you try explore my more subtle, gentle side


The Quiet.

Quiet as mouse I will be.
You will hear sound out of me.
Alone in my mouse hole is there find me.
Quiet as I can be

I am a mouse try stay alive.
From all poison you put down.
I still here in my hole.
Quiet as can be.



ouch! sounds like a reference to AuntSheckys thread. Don't take on so Zoo. You have your very own fan club here!

[zoolane]

ouch! sounds like a reference to AuntSheckys thread. Don't take on so Zoo. You have your very own fan club here!

I won't, had few little doubts last night when answer Aunty thread but stubborn and determine got better of me.

I had notice about my very own fan club and suppose you are all going want free gifts of sorts.:smilewinkgrin:

[Delta40]

just a cut of the money you make!

[zoolane]

just a cut of the money you make!

OK Not sure that happened, plus I am not that good far from, got long wayl ol

[Delta40]

I'm a patient person Zoo!

[zoolane]

I'm a patient person Zoo!

Ok then worst come the worst, leave something in my will for you and if I pop my socks before you.:p

[dafydd manton]

Zoo, the only free gift we all want is some more of your unique poetry, and since yours is, by its very nature, probably the most unusual on here, and your circumstances a one-off, anybody that would be rude about your work will have a lot to answer for. Keep writing, and forget the nonsense.

[Delta40]

Zoo, the only free gift we all want is some more of your unique poetry, and since yours is, by its very nature, probably the most unusual on here, and your circumstances a one-off, anybody that would be rude about your work will have a lot to answer for. Keep writing, and forget the nonsense.

Hear, Hear, hear the crowd roar! :iagree:

[zoolane]

Zoo, the only free gift we all want is some more of your unique poetry, and since yours is, by its very nature, probably the most unusual on here, and your circumstances a one-off, anybody that would be rude about your work will have a lot to answer for. Keep writing, and forget the nonsense.


Hear, Hear, hear the crowd roar! :iagree:

Thank you all. You I know I will try have go write poem for you both, few other people (friends).


Under Died Love

As my under died love.
Burn in my very soul.
Wish you will stay forever.
My heart beat with very stroke made.

As you spread out your love.
For all to see in very shape and form.
Wish that they to could same as us.

Blended in are unique way.
Maybe we will be together, when I older and senile.

[zoolane]

Hillwalker.

Hillwalker live up hill.
Hes in highlands in Scotland.
With hes hikers boots by hes bedside.
Notepad and pen is everywhere in hes house.
Even in hes PJ's pocket.

Delta

Delta is her name.
she sweet and from under down.
She write with passion.
She has passion in heart and soul.

Dafy

Dafy is still pilot at heart.
With camera in one hand and mic in other.
He loves rugby and speak welsh.
In hes sleep hes draws cartoons.

Haunted.

Haunted is her name.
But far from, she gentle soul.
She live in land of free.
Cats are her flatmates.
She theatrical type of girl.

Jerry

Jerry is inevitable soul.
Come in with hes long poems.
But hes cheat by get other to do hes dirty work.
Jerry is bald, smooth as baby's bum.


Skia tomorrow.

[Delta40]

lol. I love your description of us all (esp smooth as a baby's bum!) Thanks Zoo for the thoughtful sentiments.

[Haunted]

I always wanted to say that about Jerry but didn't have the guts. :D

good one zoo, thanks for including me ;)

oh sorry, I meant to say it's so mediocre but you know what I really mean....

[zoolane]

I always wanted to say that about Jerry but didn't have the guts. :D

good one zoo, thanks for including me ;)

oh sorry, I meant to say it's so mediocre but you know what I really mean....

Your welcome Haunted, I am glad you like it.

[hillwalker]

I feel honoured - and I can't get over how you have managed to capture us all so accurately (except for my PJs tha is - or lack of - but we won't go there!).

Who can fail to be captivated by such a sweet bunch of verses. xxx

H

[zoolane]

I feel honoured - and I can't get over how you have managed to capture us all so accurately (except for my PJs tha is - or lack of - but we won't go there!).

Who can fail to be captivated by such a sweet bunch of verses. xxx

H

Hi H,
I just though it light mood bit, cheer few people and I cheated bit I look that everyone profiles.:p

[Skia]

Zoo - You really are a special person :)
Your words never fail to cheer us up!
You are such a star! :)

[dafydd manton]

Zoo, I am deeply honoured, and as Hill said, you've captured us all rather well. You are of course right, my mind still at 30,000 feet when the rest of me is down here, so congratulations on good research and observation. Diolch yn fawr iawn! And the image of Jerry's head, well.....!

[zoolane]

Zoo, I am deeply honoured, and as Hill said, you've captured us all rather well. You are of course right, my mind still at 30,000 feet when the rest of me is down here, so congratulations on good research and observation. Diolch yn fawr iawn! And the image of Jerry's head, well.....!

Dafy the toilet just across the hall, you can not missed it.