frosty sail

[ryandyson]

the room is furring
silky web-like spheres are floating and collapsing softly against everything
but when I walk into them they stick and snag

I fall backwards
upside down, suspended

my eyes fix on a scribble
curl around wrought iron bars twisting in a nature crash
pull me towards a distant scribble harbour -
I see glinting boats and tinkling sails, gulls soaring golden white
charcoal shadows swarming over grey land
swarming now into the shape of a man, running
I feel like I should run

glinting and tinkling grow into deafening drilling, blinding flashes
a black blood fracture rips through everything like a tornado eye -

I am in my room.
weary headed, I go to bed.

a rope shimmers gold in the tannic sky
tied in a love-knot by the ancients
a pendulum
inscribes the rusty dunes
makes the heavens speak

wrenched warlike from the sky
by a quivering hand
throws off a crop of golden shimmers
twisting shadow snakes

and I never saw a thing
more startling
than this black land spilling
over everything

back towards the blackness I hear it coming I feel it hurtling down
sky cracks open like an egg and shatters in an ocean of glass knives -

I am in a forest of glass
crystal twigs snapping in the icy night


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[hillwalker]

Nightmarish and surreal. I like the way you use words for their sounds as much as for their meaning - 'tannic sky' for example; not quite 'titanic' but each reader will come up with their own image for that.

Very enjoyable.

H

[zoolane]

my eyes fix on a scribble
curl around wrought iron bars twisting in a nature crash
pull me towards a distant scribble harbour -
I see glinting boats and tinkling sails, gulls soaring golden white
charcoal shadows swarming over grey land
swarming now into the shape of a man, running
I feel like I should run


http://www.asphara.wordpress.com

I like poem special this verse, it remain of 'Alfred Hitchcock film The Bird'.

''sky cracks open like an egg and shatters in an ocean of glass knives'' I love this line.

[ryandyson]

Wow - I never thought of the Birds; that's a really cool crit, thank!