''Special''

[zoolane]

''Special''


The room is thick with smoke.
I am feeling giddy, the room is spinning.
I have warm, fuzzy feeling inside me.
I know I am special and lovely because he told me so.

When I with him.
I am glowing with bright light all round me.
I am floating high with in and amongst the cotton wool clouds.
I can dance in the rain with glee.

[zoolane]

:devil: Acts

The things I have done.
I should be ashamed of myself but I am not.
With my heart and soul black as night sky.

Here I am in my own personal hell.
With only depths of despair and the devil for company.
Here I am swallowing in the hole of self pity.

I am engulfed in acts of revenge and devaition.:

[aliengirl]

- "Special"

Nice poem Zoo with a few lovely images. How funny that we suddenly realize that we are special when someone tells us so. Otherwise we often tend to ignore our own self and only lament for what we don't have.

I like your style. Its so spontaneous. :)

[zoolane]

;):auto: Thank you, you're star.

[dafydd manton]

Funnily, Zoo, you used a phrase I hve often shared with someone very special - warm and fuzzy - and for that alone I would love "Special", but it goes further than that. Thanks for a lovely piece of work.

"Acts" - the smiling little devil says it all! Don't be ashamed, not from anything you might have done, just learn from it - and I think I can safely say that we on here all know you are a VERY quick learner!!! Again, a lovely poem.

Cheers

[hillwalker]

Two good poems zoo - you do a great job of showing the world through the innocent eyes of a child in 'Special' - and of course your dark side glares at us all out of 'Acts'. Good stuff.

H

[zoolane]

''Special''


The room is thick with smoke.
I am feeling giddy, the room is spinning.
I have warm, fuzzy feeling inside me.
I know I am special and lovely because he told me so.

When I am with him.
I am glowing with bright light all round me.
I am floating high within and amongst the cotton wool clouds.
I can dance in the rain with glee.

H, I hope this filled the challenge that you set me last night.

[hillwalker]

hehe - yeh.

But perhaps you could add a 3rd verse explaining how the 'kind grownup' is really more like a big bad wolf?

H

[zoolane]

Funnily, Zoo, you used a phrase I hve often shared with someone very special - warm and fuzzy - and for that alone I would love "Special", but it goes further than that. Thanks for a lovely piece of work.

"Acts" - the smiling little devil says it all! Don't be ashamed, not from anything you might have done, just learn from it - and I think I can safely say that we on here all know you are a VERY quick learner!!! Again, a lovely poem.

Cheers

Hi dafy,
I am glad you like it, it remind you of lovely memory and ''Acts''
is other side to little plot run through most of poems at I have wrote in last few days, I think most of you have guess,

''Acts'' is basic on the girl when she older and when she that her low point very with bit self loath and hint of revenge.

[zoolane]

hehe - yeh.

But perhaps you could add a 3rd verse explaining how the 'kind grownup' is really more like a big bad wolf?

H

Yet other challenge I will accept gracious but this will probably take me bit due apts and domestic chores.

Hmm I wonder he will think of next?

[zoolane]

Changing for season.

My days grew darker.
When he got mood.
I ran away to find a small corner to hide.
I wish that I could of melt into background.

In 1 minute he was all over me.
In next minute I would see a fist come at me.

First time I met one of hes friend.
I was coming down, had jitters, sweat and anxious.
I began to frigid, beggar for more on my hands and knees.
It was suggest by hes friend, that he would share.

I would have to do favour for him.
In to bedroom I go, follow by friend.
I felt degrade, dirty, worthless,used.
My hands had mark round wrists.




It was inspired by Maryd poem.
You're

You're hurt me.
You deceive me.
You're selfish.
You're untrustworthy of my friendship.

Would you steal my sky.
Just to further your own ambitions.
Would you steal my very though
Would you steal skin.

Would you steal my soul.
Just save own from devil himself.

[hillwalker]

There's a suggestion of so much emotional pain in this - and the whole cocktail of drug-taking and sex without none of the glamour.

[zoolane]

So sound and readed ok then?

[Haunted]

Why is it that I feel there's something more sinister in "special"? I had this picture of an adult trying to get a little girl drunk... And the quotes around the word special, it's as though it lacks sincerity but only said as a come on.

[hillwalker]

Yes, zoo. It reads like the disjointed memories of a young girl suddenly realising life is not so sweet. You've done a good job.

H

[zoolane]

Why is it that I feel there's something more sinister in "special"? I had this picture of an adult trying to get a little girl drunk... And the quotes around the word special, it's as though it lacks sincerity but only said as a come on.

Hi Haunted,
You're right in think, there more to this poem then adult get child drunk, to point you're long correct lines about the ''come on'' but if you readed ''Special'' then Changing of Season one after each other, it might fell in place.