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Lamar Cole
09-29-2010, 06:36 PM
The stars shone brightly.
The moon sprinkled magic from heaven above.
The night is calm.
In the valley of love.

An owl hoots.
The deer are like statues.
My sweetheart is sweet like an apple.
The juices of love flow freely.

Jerrybaldy
09-30-2010, 08:08 PM
may just be me but the title sounded pornographic. beyond that its romantic and sweet.

Delta40
09-30-2010, 08:14 PM
I was prompted by the line In the valley of love to think of Elvis and Neil Diamond - Lord knows why but I wouldn't mind being in the woods with one of them at the height of their fame!

Silas Thorne
09-30-2010, 08:59 PM
There are some beautiful lyrical phrases in here, but I'm not sure whether the title fits the poem. The phrase is rather loaded and sexual.If you want to write about the 'juices of love', you might be better expanding on the content. ;)
It does sound a lot like a song though, I'm looking for music in it. But of course when the juices of love flow there's always music to those close enough to hear it. ;)