Dusty Love

[Delta40]

Look upon me, nay feel my wooded heart
That your grief might moisten its dead pulse
like the tears of a tumbleweed which swirls
through my wasteland of love for you

[hillwalker]

Short but filled with such despair, or is it longing?

I like the expression 'like the tears of a tumbleweed'

H

[Delta40]

Thanks Hill. I was trying to depict some sort of emotional deadland

[loki456]

definitely despair.
I, like Hill am quite impressed with the impact of this with so few words. Makes me feel like i'm looking through the mirror at some sort of jaded love, or love never known.
thanks.

[Delta40]

Thanks loki. Its chilling to know I wrote this...

[Delta40]

I feel a familiar ache in my back
that throbs harder as the night wears on
I hope it is from crouching too much
but I am only fooling myself
It pounds relentlessly at my side
till the sheer intensity of it
is like standing in an underground tunnel
as the bacteria rushes through my veins
Oh to curl up into a ball on this platform
of sickness and just die
as waves of nausea wash over me
my base cliched head cannot think clearly
gallons of water flush the infection
that causes contractions in my guts
I stumble back and forth to the loo
burning sensation of razor blades
in every concentrated drop
I weep for the comfort of a hot water bottle
but its heat is confused with my fever
Finally I wretch till I hope my kidney
will plop out for me to discard
Left weak, head drooping in the bowl,
I am beaten.
Two showers later and I
pray the worst has passed
but my yearning for sleep
eludes this defeated body
Writing through pain killer eyes
is not enough to cure me

[Jerrybaldy]

I know what you mean above Delta.
Four winning lines.
JB

[Delta40]

pass my heart a bottle of Nivea...

[dafydd manton]

A dessicated love, excellently portrayed. You can almost feel the arid, dry atmosphere. Thanks for this.

[Delta40]

Guys, guys I love you all....

[dafydd manton]

Oh, Delta, the pain in here, the sheer agony, the suffering, the despair, and not a detail omitted. You have excelled yourself. I'm sure we'd all love to just come and give you a big hug, and try to make you feel better.

It must have taken a lot of writing, and I am mightily impressed. Thanks for sharing.

[dafydd manton]

Flattery gets you everywhere......!!!!!

[Delta40]

God I want to rip my own insides out and wash them under a tap. I'm sure I'll feel better if I do....

[zoolane]

I have got codeline if you need great poem about pain.:grouphug:

[Delta40]

can you sponsor me with montly payments to the cost of running my household perchance?

[dafydd manton]

*Whooooooosssshhhhhh!!!!!* (leaves huge cloud of dust - never ask a man for commitment!!!)

[Delta40]

Go on Zoo
hit me with a double dose of the stuff
and put me out of my misery!

[Delta40]

Ha Once again I'm left holding the baby....Men!

[zoolane]

send by super fast post :chillpill::chillpill::chillpill:

[dafydd manton]

Baby? You never said......!

[Delta40]

tossing them down my gullet with a litre of water....

[Delta40]

Well its a chubby little four month old electricity bill actually....

[Haunted]

So much emotion in just four lines. Well delivered.

[Silas Thorne]

Thanks Hill. I was trying to depict some sort of emotional deadland

Do or do not... there is no try.
Yoda :)

[Delta40]

Now that's some good wisdom Silas!

[dafydd manton]

tossing them down my gullet with a litre of water....

What...Babies? Is that legal in Oz? :arf:

[Silas Thorne]

small ones I think, otherwise they get stuck in the throat

[Jerrybaldy]

I am not talking to you so dont take this posting as some kind of truce or sumfink but you should post something this good in a fresh post.
Jerry
not here
just a figment of your imagination
judas
etc
:D

[Delta40]

I've never had lit-netters tiff before. Can we seek online counselling or something

Crispy babies with no added salt....aaaaarrrrrgh

[Jerrybaldy]

Acas Shmacas
That reminds me there was a dispute at the birds eye pea factory the other week. They called in ACAS. It was a processed peas peace process :D

[dafydd manton]

Better boiled - softer.....!! With vegemite, just for Jerry!

[Delta40]

still have a sense of humour. You and Daffy are peas from the same pod

[Delta40]

That's not fair. I wrote Dusty Love yesterday and Infection this morning. HERE IN AUSTRALIA. its ok folks, don't panic!

[dafydd manton]

Australia? NOW you tell us - I thought you were in Milton Keynes!

[Delta40]

Hrrrrmmph!

[dafydd manton]

Just trying to cheer you up, with you feeling rough!!!

[Delta40]

I'm going to go and lie down and see if I can catch up on some missed sleep. I have an assignment to hand in today.