Little Poems.

[zoolane]

Owl

Here I am sitting in my tree.
Fluffy up my feathers.
Waiting to drift off to sleep.
When I wake up.
There will be.
Silver, grey with touch of yellow.
Specs dots round the sky.


Story Teller

My imaginations is running wild.
Long,short words in front of my eyes.
Pick the best words that flowing.
That help me tell my tale.

[Skia]

Hii Zoo!

Owl
I can just picture the the fluffy creature perched upon the branch with it's gleaming yellow eyes sparkling in the moonlight :)

Storyteller
Loved how you can portray a mind of a wordsworth in four lines

:)

Well done and thanks for sharing!
All the best :)

[hillwalker]

Love the simple way you describe the night sky through the owl's eyes...
and the second poem, words words, we all see them flashing before our eyes.

H

[dafydd manton]

I loved both of these, personal preference is the second one, just because its something I spend most of my life having to do. Well done, your poetry is progressing beautifully.

[zoolane]

Songbird.

Songbird flutter it wondrous wings.
Opening her apricot beak.
Sending out her heaven notes.
Over the trees top and hills.
Then reaching the town folks.

The town folks listen tendly.
To radiant, effortless of sound be carry through town.

[aliengirl]

I like all the three poems especially 'Storyteller'.

[zoolane]

Thank you all, I am just try hand that any subject matter that pop in my head.
Next is:
The Struggle

Bubbles that rising to surfare.
Struggling to catch a breath.
See the botton coming toward you.

Intense feeling of be pulled and pushed at same time.
The hands that griping sides tightly and with fear.

Free to breath the cool air.
Dripping wet all over the place.
No shadow lurking in a dark corner somewhere.

[Delta40]

Your imagination really is flowing Zoo. I love the fluffy up feathered owl the most. Keep writing!

[zoolane]

Moral Downfall

One teen mum has to pick out of 3 yobs.
Ending up on Jermery Kyle Show.
For free DNA, turn out that its not right 3 yobs

1 tag on yob leg, is not enough for him.
Drugs, alcholic and fight is what left tag for.
Break in to neighbours house, so prision is what the yob headed for.


15 years later, school girl is on her way school?
She get off bus before her stop.
She bunked off school, meet her yob boyfriend.

So cycle begins again, is going mum to daughter.

[blank|verse]

Ooh, there's lots here, zoolane. 'The Struggle' is quite disturbing. Good stuff.

And here's a great poem featuring an owl (http://www.poetryarchive.org/poetryarchive/singlePoem.do?poemId=1672)you might enjoy...

[hillwalker]

I think your darker stuff is more authentic - and 'The Struggle' is nightmarish without revealing the exact nature of the threat. Powerful stuff.

H

[zoolane]

Nagging Voice.

There nagging voice inside your head.
Its alway there in background.
Always reappear in your head, that most impossible time.

Inside your head is blackhole.
The blackhole is getting bigger.
Its draining your reality way.

Tick, dock going the clock.
The nagging voice is taking over your realiy.

[dafydd manton]

The Struggle made me think very much fo drowning, of having been thrown in the deep end, which happened to me as a kid, as a result of which I hate swimming, or water in large quantities. Its very graphic, I like the short, snappy style.

[zoolane]

Well done Dafy, you hit nail on head. :cool:

[aliengirl]

Wow Zoo! you have a lot of good stuff here. I liked The Struggle very much. The imagery of bubbles is very apt. Moral Downfall and Painting the Bedroom are dark, yet powerful.

[zoolane]

The whispering in the shadow,
It calling me 'come here'.
I look round, seeing only me.
The whisper is now chanting.

The shadow is getting taller.
The whispering is everywhere.
The chanting with a angry voice.
I am move closer but with caution.

As I get closer the whisper gets quiet.
Now my curiousity mind is wonder 'why me'.
I get to the corner, where whispering come from.
The shadow fade into light but .....

The only thing I see is written on wall.



Thank you Alien girl. I am glad you like the 'The Struggle and Painting The Bedroom'.


The playground.

Pow going the fist.
Twisting as flys through the air.
Sliced above the eye.
Drip, drip going scarlet liquid.

Thumb going the other one.
Double over in pain.
Spawl out on the playground.
Here come the boot.

[Haunted]

I share the same nagging voice. Love these, short and punchy, especially the playground.

[hillwalker]

You are on a roll, zoo. And your darker, menacing poems are definitely your best - very atmospheric.

H

[zoolane]

I have alway said that I do not doing love dovey or sentimental poems.
Ok few then.

Thank you Haunted and Hillwalker.

[zoolane]

As she lay under the sheets shrivering.
Her mind wonders what horror is in store for her night.
She try hard as she can to stay still.
Suddenly her leg twitch.

She hears the door opening.
Footsteps are getting closer to bed.
The sheet is lift up, small breeze washing over her.

The hand is slowly moving it way to her.
She pulled out from under the sheet.
She whisper ''Please not again, I won't tell M..''
Slowly the hand smooths down ruffle her hair.

She began to cry, wishing she was somewhere else.
The big,rough hands are now under her nightie.
She is pushed on to the bed, the monster climb upon her.

[zoolane]

Their bump is bigger all time.
It start of small as dot.
Then into turn a creature.

With 2 upper limbs and same low limbs,
Funny shape head with loud piercing noise from it.

It reach adulthood with died.
It get itself nice cosy life.

Then meet other creature.
Who different from it.

Turn out this new creature.
Is satan with dark ring round it eyes.
Satan creature then think,
That 1st creature is to pure for this world.

[zoolane]

Sticks to poke you with.
Sticks to battery you with,
Sticks to threat you with.
Sticks to use trip you with.

Words threw at you.
Words to hurt you.
Words to cut your emotions with.
Words to make you feel worthless with.

[Skia]

Zoo, you are on a roll...!

Obviously I love Sticks

The last two lines really made the poem whole...


Words to cut your emotions with.
Words to make you feel worthless with.

Thats going on my Signature :)

[dafydd manton]

"Monster" is horrific, very graphic, and you have made the fear tangible, real. It is a superb poem.

"Sticks" is equally as good, very expressive, hard-hitting, and again, graphic. You have an excellent way fo dealing with subjects that are normally considered taboo, for which I salute you. Well done, Zoo, but don't give up on the sentimental as well, please!

[zoolane]

Thank you Skia it actual one your poems that inspired me , well to point it comment made by Hillwalker.

I feel very flatter about last 2 lines of humble poem by use as your signature.

[zoolane]

"Monster" is horrific, very graphic, and you have made the fear tangible, real. It is a superb poem.

"Sticks" is equally as good, very expressive, hard-hitting, and again, graphic. You have an excellent way fo dealing with subjects that are normally considered taboo, for which I salute you. Well done, Zoo, but don't give up on the sentimental as well, please!

I will try but I think just have wait for it come to me.

[hillwalker]

Aha - even before I read your last comment I think 'Sticks' is one of your best on this thread. The repetition like a nightmarish nursery rhyme - extremely effective.

H

[Skia]

I'm glad my poem helped you to write a brilliant poem !
I hope you don't mind me using "

"Words to cut your emotions with.
Words to make you feel worthless with" - Zoolane
"

^ That on my signature Zoo :D I really like em. :D

[zoolane]

I feel very honour that you want uses my words. :thumbs_up

[dafydd manton]

Skia, a lovely tribute - you are a star!!!!! I am full of admiration for that gesture.

[zoolane]

Should I be worry about the words I write.
With all this darkness in my words.
The words sinking to my soul.
Will I go Hell?

[dafydd manton]

Just write - and the answer is an emphatic "NO!"

[zoolane]

Just write - and the answer is an emphatic "NO!"

Thank you.


The heart with glass case round it.
With under breakable shield.
Protective from all those who want break it

Slow protective barrier come down.
Little bit warm invite in from cold.
Two melted it to each other.

Warm get bit cooler.
Mean well the heart think 'why?'.
Warm jump out from the heart protective shied.

The heart put double strength barriers from now on.

[Skia]

Daf - I'm happy that such lovely words can be inspired from my poetry!
I love them honestly :)

Zoo -
Should I be worry about the words I write.
With all this darkness in my words.
The words sinking to my soul.
Will I go Hell?

I had the exact same thought the other day... but then I realised, when I right I try to place my mind in the mind of others I write as if I were them, not myself. I don't want to kill a golddigger and offer my soul to the devil :P

It just shows how creative you are!! :D

[zoolane]

Daf - I'm happy that such lovely words can be inspired from my poetry!
I love them honestly :)

Zoo -
Should I be worry about the words I write.
With all this darkness in my words.
The words sinking to my soul.
Will I go Hell?

I had the exact same thought the other day... but then I realised, when I right I try to place my mind in the mind of others I write as if I were them, not myself. I don't want to kill a golddigger and offer my soul to the devil :P

It just shows how creative you are!! :D


Like bit about 'golddigger and offer my soul to the devil'
Some reason it just seem come quite natural to me, even when I was young alway put myself other person shoes.

[hillwalker]

'Worry' ? - don't worry. Writing can be therapeutic, allowing your imagination free rein and getting those negative thoughts out of your system.

Also, it's great fun.

H

[zoolane]

I think my imagination run way with spoon and dish over moon.:smilielol5::arf:

[Skia]

It does flow from the pen easily, (for me) lots of Dark things surround the news nowerdays, never happy ones. So we are always familiar with the "dark side" of things etc. :)

[zoolane]

Get inspired other people write or just doing chores, stare in space and going shop.

[Skia]

I do get inspired by many things, shopping, eating, reading and even lamposts inspire me :)

[Jerrybaldy]

zoo.You have turned into a poetic volcano. So much gets lost in poems within threads, I think. Slow your eruption and post separately. just my opinion as always has to be said on here as it is always felt, but I love the way you are flourishing on here from a stumbling begining to an outpouring. You are inspirational zoo.
bestest wishes
Jerry

[Delta40]

Get inspired other people write or just doing chores, stare in space and going shop.

Me too Zoo! its often the everyday mundane things which are so interesting.

[zoolane]

zoo.You have turned into a poetic volcano. So much gets lost in poems within threads, I think. Slow your eruption and post separately. just my opinion as always has to be said on here as it is always felt, but I love the way you are flourishing on here from a stumbling begining to an outpouring. You are inspirational zoo.
bestest wishes
Jerry

I will try slow down but intend get flash of inspiration them 1-3 in space hour and follow forum set by Scheherazade.

I will remember to 1 post for 1-3 poems?

[Jerrybaldy]

shehelemonade is quite forgiving I only have a handful of penalty points (lifetime points) and a few warnings and I would like to say that I think that he or she is a very very nice person

[Skia]

I got two warnings already *Yikes!!*

[hillwalker]

I'm surprised they gave you a Warning for using capital Letters inappropriately at the start Of random words.

most Unfair!

h

[dafydd manton]

DesPicaBull!

[Skia]

Aha,
also,
doing,
this,
randomly,
ha,
ha,
ha,
ha,

:D :lol:

[hillwalker]

Don't worry. It's just like being given an asbo really.
If you carry on the way you are you'll probably end up being forced to wear a LitNet ankle-tag, but they're quite attractive.

H

[Skia]

Aaah... I see,
nice one... Just don't want to get blocked from here! :D

[hillwalker]

Just don't want to get blocked from here! :D

Blocked? What the **** have you been up to?

You don't have to answer that.... "But it may harm your defence if you do not mention when questioned something which you later rely on in court." (lol)

H

[Skia]

Aha,
nothing more Hill than multiple posts,
I cannot control my poetic outbursts! :P

[aliengirl]

Sticks to poke you with.
Sticks to battery you with,
Sticks to threat you with.
Sticks to use trip you with.

Words threw at you.
Words to hurt you.
Words to cut your emotions with.
Words to make you feel worthless with.

I am sorry Zoo that I missed this brilliant poem and at the same time I am glad that I read it today. I don't like it, I LOVE it. There is something special about this short, sharp, and punchy poem. Skia is right about the last two lines. They are the finest lines in your work.
Keep writing dear.

[zoolane]

Thank you Dear I am you like 'LOVE IT!.