star rise

[hack]

dark water, summer soft
lit by evening's first star
reflected in growing profusion
faceted diamonds set their net
for the absent moon

[PrinceMyshkin]

Wonderful throughout and heightened at the end by the reference to the mysteriously "absent moon."

[blank|verse]

Nice observation and enjoyably imaginative metaphor that reminded me a bit of 'Tattoo' by Wallace Stevens.

I found the lack of punctuation led to the poem being read quicker than I would have liked, but that's a small issue. Good stuff, hack.

[dafydd manton]

Wonderful, Hack. Loved it - I can just picture a dark night, by a pool, solitude, quiet...... Thanks so much.

[Hawkman]

A quiet, evocative and contemplative piece, hack and a pleasure to read. Thanks, H

[Delta40]

love faceted diamonds and absent moon. very nice writing

[hillwalker]

Great piece hack - love the image of a net being set to capture the moon once it finally appears.

[Bar22do]

A lace-like piece of art, hack, you finally returned! and with your now regular high standards! What a treasure to read you. A short poem with one comma, one apostrophe and one big moon to catch!... Thanks a lot.

[Jerrybaldy]

Ok I am too late. everything I thought has been said, so I refer you to the above and congratulate you on your beautiful verse.
Jerry

[hack]

Thank you all. You are too kind.
I have been away, distracted
by the moon...peace...

[Silas Thorne]

Excellent and beautiful, particularly last two lines. I'll try to throw some salt in here though. Not too sure about 'summer soft', the inversion doesn't seem to match the rest of the poem. Maybe just me.

[hack]

Perhaps you are right Silas. It is oblique.
It is a purposely fuliginous descriptor of
the substrate on which the stars are
reflected. Maybe it is too clever by half.
...peace...

[Silas Thorne]

purposely fuliginous descriptor of
the substrate on which the stars are
reflected.

hahaha!

[hack]

A laugh is better, by far, than fuliginous smile.
...peace..

[Silas Thorne]

Can't work one, don't have one, don't ask me, Sooty!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XPQu98oMPIo&feature=related

[Lumiere]

hack be back.
Your poems are delicious.
I was especially satisfied with the bit about the net.