Mortality.

[zoolane]

Howl through wind, vibration echos down my ears
Whines, moaning noise comes from other room, with a bang here & there.
Scratch come the interior wall but is omnipresent.
Get unbearable to abide, brave person would stay.

Not I, turmoil is destroy my mental health.
It slow forcing me reaction, to find consolation in death.
Mortality will be saviour, my one save grace.
Demons arise engulfed in fire, try pull me down to.

Death is my saviour.

[hillwalker]

This is a dark one, zoo. It starts off suggesting it might be the wind, but soon becomes something much more sinister.

[zoolane]

This is a dark one, zoo. It starts off suggesting it might be the wind, but soon becomes something much more sinister.

It idea of poem was very innocent one. Little 2 verses but as usual things came to me and it they when.

You will never guess what subject matter is.

[hillwalker]

Unless you have a neighbour who regularly practices playing his bagpipes, no I won't.

[zoolane]

It suppose being about dog, whine, howl in hes cage.

[hillwalker]

Aha - similar sound to what I was suggesting, but different source (lol),

[NikolaiI]

There are a couple English errors, but nothing major. This is a great poem, zoolane, and it shows you're a really good poet. Thanks for posting.

[zoolane]

Thank you Nikolail, I think errors sometime add to style of poem and btw you paid me great comment with line 'it shows you're a really good poet.'

[dafydd manton]

Nik is right, though, Zoo, and your style is so unique. The poem makes you wonder how anybody coulod do something like that to anything, animal or human. Thanks!

[NikolaiI]

You're welcome. It's nice to see your poems.

[Delta40]

this is the kind of poem that the reader can interpret it however they choose. I like the howling wind and the suggestion of something darker related to me.

[Haunted]

I like this a lot. But I do think that the unique grammatical style, while it distinguishes you, can also get in the way. I would read and then stop and have to re-read by substituting proper grammar. I guess it all comes down to whether you want to be known by style or actually what you say.

[zoolane]

I am glad you to like but suggest made you reading it back to myself halfway through is excalted what I do and sometime it work, sometimes not. I would like be know for style and what said not for my grammar but guess I am limbo with it still. (find my feet still in poetry)