PDA

View Full Version : The Great Escape Fail



Delta40
09-19-2010, 05:59 PM
At the nursing home
Stripey George puffs up the corridor
on his wheeled frame
Another troubled visitor
choking back her tears
punches the PIN at the exit door
'Waiiit!' he cries and speeds up
one hand outstretched,
as the lady dabs her eyes
at the open door
and puts her hanky in her bag
She walks through
as George screeches to a record halt
and reaches for the handle of freedom
just as the safety lock ominously clicks
trapped animal groans echo through
the lifeless lounge where the elderly sleep
to Green Acres blaring on the tv
George whines like a wounded dog
and shuffles slowly round the room
muttering to no one who can hear
while an old lady bent in half
uses her hands to wash the floor

dafydd manton
09-19-2010, 06:23 PM
Makes you ope you will never get old, and reliant on so-called professionals.....

A touch of bitterness, I felt, but great work, nonetheless.

Delta40
09-19-2010, 06:26 PM
I witnessed this yesterday when I accompanied a friend on a visit to her mother.

dafydd manton
09-19-2010, 06:33 PM
Horrible, isnt it. The sheer indignity of getting old, in a home. I sincerely hope that if I ever get like that, those that love me wil be there with me, not shove me away somewhere.

Delta40
09-19-2010, 06:38 PM
perhaps I should make it a veterans home to better reflect the poem's title

dafydd manton
09-19-2010, 06:39 PM
No, don't change anything!

Delta40
09-19-2010, 07:03 PM
I will think about it. problem for me is I jot down a poem in the throes of getting ready for work when I should take more time over its construction and revise it also. i seldom get to that point. I'm thinking of taking a break so I can go over what i have written in the past and play around with them a bit more rather than viewing them like bits of quick drying cement

Haunted
09-19-2010, 07:11 PM
what a bleak picture you've painted here. Very touching.