You Colored Me Violet

[Dark Muse]

You Colored Me Violet

I still remember
the day you colored
me in violet
and with my eyes
closed I imagined
I was falling forever
into indigo fields,
a sweet oblivion
far away.

But the aroma
suffocates me still,
when I see the blooms
I recall blood smeared
tears, looking in the mirror
my face like a blossom in spring,
watching the changing hues,
wishing I could be a forget-me-not
or better yet a bull thistle
then I would not be the only one
to bleed.

Now I will drape
you in a blanket of lilies,
watching them fall
one by one, each
like one of my frozen
tears which I cannot
shed for you.

[dafydd manton]

A beautiful love poem, I can almost sense the loss from here. Thank you for a tneder piece of work that I'm sure many of us will be able to identify with.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you, though I am not sure I would call this poem tender. I think you interpretation of the meaning varies a bit from my own, though such is the nature of poetry, and I have a particular tendency to allow a certain vagueness and elusiveness in my work.

[Skia]

Wow, I can almost feel the pain and heartache from here.

[hillwalker]

I'll go out on a limb and say I took this to be a poem written by a battered wife looking into the mirror perhaps - wishing she could repay the guilty party:

better yet a bull thistle
then I would not be the only one
to bleed.

This is subtly done because it does indeed read like a tender love poem.

H

[Dark Muse]

I'll go out on a limb and say I took this to be a poem written by a battered wife looking into the mirror perhaps - wishing she could repay the guilty party:

better yet a bull thistle
then I would not be the only one
to bleed.

This is subtly done because it does indeed read like a tender love poem.

H

Bravo! You have pretty much hit the nail on the head right there.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Thanks for (partially) endorsing Hillwalker's interpretation. Without the knowledge of the symbolism of the several mentioned blossoms, I wouldn't have ventured an interpretation of my own but was entranced by the emotion of this beautiful poem.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you! I rather like the contrast of flowers, which generally are seen as being soft, and beautiful, delicate, and assocaited traditionally with positive feelings, being used as an expression of violence. It does throw the reader off a bit but it also speaks to the fragility in people, and perhaps as well the renaissance, for even though flowers may look helpless they can be quite hard and some do even come with thier own defense system.

[dafydd manton]

That's what threw me off, I couldn't have been more wrong, could I. Sorry!! Now I know that (thanks, Hill), I can understand it a whole lot better. I only hope this comes from the banks of your prodigious imagination....

[Dark Muse]

That's what threw me off, I couldn't have been more wrong, could I. Sorry!! Now I know that (thanks, Hill), I can understand it a whole lot better. I only hope this comes from the banks of your prodigious imagination....

Yes, this one is the workings of my imgination. It was originally written for a prompt contest in which the prompt was flowers, and with such a comon and cliched poetry topic, I really wanted to push the boundries and do something completely different with the subject.

[miyako73]

Thanks, Dark. A poem like that makes me stick to my belief that not everything is ugly.

[Bar22do]

You handled the subject masterfully, and your idea is so original. Your poem flows effortlessly and leads one into a hypnotic state where all seems vague until the meaning strikes waking the reader! Great. Thanks for sharing.

[Delta40]

when it comes to taking love and transforming it into pain of the poetic kind, you are a master at this. Once again you hypnotized me with sweet memories of love only to dash them against a rock as it is tranformed into pain of the lovelorn kind

[Dark Muse]

Thank you very much!

[Delta40]

I know I said transformed twice and poetic and lovelorn but I guess I just can't empahsise your art enough!

[Dark Muse]

Well your support and comments are always greatly apperciated.

[kittypaws]

Dark Muse ~ I enjoy your style of writing

I have a particular tendency to allow a certain vagueness and elusiveness in my work.
I can admire this as it let's others create their own 'poem' from yours.

Very well done and I am glad sleuth Hillwalker had the hammer! Do you think the bull thistle was the key?

kittypaws