Dust in the Wind

[BienvenuJDC]

like billows and clouds
a swarm of mites roll over the horizon
keeping watch against
an enemy I can't keep my eyes on

the dragon's breath roasts over head
it covers me in a shroud
consuming and smothering its victim
taking me down to him bowed

an antagonist raping my wits about
converting my flesh to its own
overcome I have transformed into
the dust cloud I am sewn

No longer am I the one who I was
but twirling about in the whirled
a cyclone of issues I have become
hoping from its guts I'll be hurled

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed. Very meaty poem.

Perhaps dragon's breath.
.
.
I think I was there:
.


.....The Dragon
.

I stare frozen, awed
as dusk looms orange to scarlet

before the dragon
.

tailor STATELY

5-21-2004

[BienvenuJDC]

Yes...thanks for the comments...

[PrinceMyshkin]

In "No longer I am the one who I was" you might consider reversing the order of "I am," but otherwise it's a powerful, vivid poem.

[Buh4Bee]

From a thematic standpoint I found the poem to be well written. I know you included a rhyming scheme and it is good. Somehow, I wish you had included either meter or more rhyme. But I liked it.

[Maryd.]

This is thought provoking... Well done again Bien.