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Delta40
09-15-2010, 05:39 PM
her strong hands
are covered in soap scum
as she briskly scrubs
your shirt between
her knuckled fists
she is fast, furious, hard
drowning the fabric
in a steaming foam tub
before wringing it as tight
as she can
she drains every drop of moisture
she washes dirty laundry
as if she were on all fours
scrubbing the floor of your hallway
her hips sway and weave an invitation
where you can splutter your delight
as you inhale the pleasure of her servitude
She catches her pinny on the brass knob
as she tries to remove
the tarnish from your family heirloom
she brings you to a quick intense climax
with the same thorough motion
of her calloused working hands
while she peels a sack of potatoes

dafydd manton
09-15-2010, 05:43 PM
How the life of the Domestic has changed - or perhaps not? Either way, it's a cheeky little number, but quite shocking as well, the casual attitude toward the woman. Not sure whether to admire her, or feel sorry for her. Nice work.

hillwalker
09-15-2010, 06:08 PM
A clever analogy - the subservient/dominant balance of class transcribed to a more sexual scenario..... but tastefully done.

Delta40
09-15-2010, 06:08 PM
upon reflection I should have titled this poem: The Hired Hand. doh!

Jerrybaldy
09-15-2010, 06:45 PM
hahaha. Im burning my bra immediately.
This poem is a great worry to all men, I think. You may well have ruined the delusions of many :D thankfully though in the heat of the moment .... *monitor* ' you better end it there' . *Jerry* 'fair nuff'

angliholic
09-15-2010, 06:55 PM
Wow!
What a maid!
A nice treat for me in the morning!

Jerrybaldy
09-15-2010, 06:56 PM
LOL @ Ang :D

NikolaiI
09-16-2010, 01:27 AM
I like this one, just as a poem it's a very good poem. Keep writing! :)

Haunted
09-16-2010, 07:38 PM
wonderfully written. You make a point about servitude without getting dirty :D

Jerrybaldy
09-16-2010, 07:40 PM
servitude... a dual opinion in many a miserable marriage.