Spitfield

[zoolane]

Swoosh through air it soar,
dipping it wing to people below.
Spitfire chase Jerry across sky,
Take aim as pilot get close.
Jerry fall into green field.

This my poem to the Battle of Britain.

Not very good.

[Jerrybaldy]

thank god for that, I thought I was being name checked at first:)Never knock yourself Zoo.
Forgive me, but I am unsure if you are young of years or whether English is not your main language? You seem to wise for it to be the former so I will put my money on the latter :)
Your poem is current ( with the anniversary) and captures a lot in few words.
Best wishes (and please enlighten me)
Jerry

[zoolane]

I am in 30s, I am english main language speak and write. I know might not seem it but I didn't take great deal of interest in secondary school which my own fault.
I admit had slight speech problem under age 10.

Watch, readed lots to do with war era, films, history channel.

[Jerrybaldy]

Thanks Zoo.
I had a speech problem too through early deafness, but sorted through speech therapy.
I think its great that having had no interest in school, you are now here writing poetry.
All respect to you
keep it going
Jerry

[Delta40]

i think the first line casts us straight into mid-air battle. simply said with a great effect

[hillwalker]

Paints a vivid picture - especially with that opening 'Swoosh' and 'soars' - one can actually see the plane diving and twisting in the sky.

Don't much care for the 'Not very good' you added at the end - you're not allowed to crit your own poems on here :-)

H

[zoolane]

thank you for all the comments, Jerry,Delta and Hillwalker.

It simple little poem. I will try not crit my own work. :spam: As because I like spam.