Love at First Sight [Archive] - Literature Network Forums

angliholic

09-10-2010, 07:59 AM

Years ago
when I was in a hurry to visit spring,
on my way I caught a glimpse of your green blouse,
dotted with deep blue polka dots,
blowing in the wind by the roadside.
I guess,
you were waiting for summer's grace.

I didn't know what love at first sight was,
and I just kept looking back on your soothing serenity.
Having asked so many friends about you,
I thought,
I'd miss your name until the twelfth of never.

Now I know,
I'll love you, Bluebell, till you forget to bloom!

PrinceMyshkin

09-10-2010, 08:04 AM

How wonderful that you don't name her (or it?) until the last line, with that intriguing final thought.

dafydd manton

09-10-2010, 08:12 AM

As Prince said, I wondered who she was, until the last bit. That line about the bouse is very clever, and utterly mis-leading. Ang does it yet again!!

Skia

09-10-2010, 08:59 AM

Flowers!!!!

Beautiful !

I Adore this poem!!

:D:D:D x

angliholic

09-10-2010, 09:39 AM

How wonderful that you don't name her (or it?) until the last line, with that intriguing final thought.
Thanks, Prince, for your wonderful feedback!
I really didn't know her name until today I heard the song "the Twelf of Never." So I decided to write a scribbling for her!

As Prince said, I wondered who she was, until the last bit. That line about the bouse is very clever, and utterly mis-leading. Ang does it yet again!!

Thanks, Daffy, for the nice feedback!
Bluebell is a very beautiful name for a girl, isn't it?

Flowers!!!!

Beautiful !

I Adore this poem!!

:D:D:D x
Thanks, Skia, for the beautiful feedback!
I'll work hard to scribble better next time!

Skia

09-10-2010, 09:58 AM

angliholic

09-10-2010, 10:49 AM

In all seriousness, (My last reply was a bit childish, but hey!- I've only just turned 18 Well, near enough :P)

That poem is incredibly well written in my opinion!

Bien cuit !
Vous êtes fantastique !

Thanks again, Skia, for the serious feedback!

Well cooked!
You're fantastic!

妳好甜
好可愛