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[twoheadedboy]

This is my first post. I was referred here from a friend. I hope to give and get some great advice.



In the loch

there stood, tall and swinging

scales and things.

But believe, even though for lack of seeing,



that packs and packs of animated discs;

had made and sewn a roughed up green;

had formed a figure out of the dark; out of the lake; out of the still.


And that figure moved slowly,

without bending,

back down into the waters.

[Delta40]

well I'm thinking of the Nessie scams here.

[hillwalker]

You manage to transform reflections off the water and dapples of coloured sunlight into a living thing - this is a very vivid poem.

and Delta - just for the record, Nessie lives and breathes as this artful poem records.

[dafydd manton]

Nessie does in deed live and breath, a we've just seen, Good-oh!

[Jerrybaldy]

I'm with Delta, it seems to indicate the Nessie scams more than Hill's and Daffy's watery version of their beloved dragons :D

Welcome twoheaded boy. Look forward to more :)

[hillwalker]

Let's hope 2HB tells us which interpretation is correct.....

[Delta40]

no offence meant to Nessie....just the scams about her!

[twoheadedboy]

I guess I would have to say that it is about a mans recollection of this beautiful fleeting thing he has seen. He's never seen anything like it before, and he probably never will again.

Atleast that is what I meant; you can take it either way, not at all or with a grain of salt.

[Jerrybaldy]

nice one twoheadedboy.
A loved up draw :) with and without salt.

[Haunted]

a cool picture of Miss Nessie.
What they said is true, two heads are better than one. Great job!

[blank|verse]

Have you read the unbeatable The Loch Ness Monster's Song (http://www.poetryarchive.org/poetryarchive/singlePoem.do?poemId=1683)by Edwin Morgan?

Yours is a good little piece. I think it's to the benefit of the poem that you don't mention the monster by name, just give the images. Good stuff.