Early autumn

[peter7805]

I love the moon in the autumn’s cold
And I shall stay with my favorite poem
The dew falls on my coat
And I am drunk in the willow
I am so shy and afraid ,oh
That my voice may disturb the birds’ pillow
And my dream is carried on my boat
Slowly down that I cross my pole

[Jassy Melson]

I love the images evoked in this poem. The last line is somewhat confusing. I think it comes down to the word 'that' used in the line.

[Haunted]

The dew falls on my coat
And I am drunk in the willow
I am so shy and afraid ,oh
That my voice may disturb the birds’ pillow

the thoughts here are really unique and whimsical, I wonder if the poem can just end here.

[Abras]

I agree with Haunted...
those four lines are very nice, esp.
"oh, That my voice may disturb the birds’ pillow"

nice work. A+ :D