sounds

[Delta40]

your excitement
squawks like cockatoos
flying above
the telegraph wires
ignorant to
the garbage truck
crawling along
its great yawning jaws
gobble up
the remains of your day
as you slip into
a frenzied sleep

[angliholic]

Vivid and tangible sounds!
Excellent analogy!

I adore this poem!
Thanks for sharing!

[Delta40]

thank you angliholic.

[dafydd manton]

Your use of different images of the mundane to sum your feelings is incredible. Love it!

[Delta40]

thanks. just going for a mundane walk to the shop. brb

[dafydd manton]

Live it up! Have a mundane ice-cream, or a mundane chocolate bar!

[Delta40]

the cat lolls
on the verandah
blinking lazily
toward the rising sun
as spring curls into a ball
of shedding fur and pollen
to collect at my door
magpies swoop
and try to peck out
my streaming eyes
I sneeze flower buds
all over the cat
take that!

[Song of Mercy]

Really concise Delta!

[Jerrybaldy]

Seemingly effortless and Deltaesque, you have a style of your own

[Delta40]

Thanks Jerry

[blank|verse]

Some great images in the first one (I particularly liked the garbage truck 'gobbling up' the rubbish).

It's an interesting poem - someone's 'excitement' is usually followed by an explanation of its cause. Here, that's ignored and you go off on a metaphorical journey of the sound of the excitement up and around your neighbourhood. Superb. (Not sure the clipped lines do the poem justice though.)

I liked Spring personified as a cat in the second as well. Good stuff.

[Delta40]

Some great images in the first one (I particularly liked the garbage truck 'gobbling up' the rubbish).

It's an interesting poem - someone's 'excitement' is usually followed by an explanation of its cause. Here, that's ignored and you go off on a metaphorical journey of the sound of the excitement up and around your neighbourhood. Superb. (Not sure the clipped lines do the poem justice though.)

thanks Blank. wasn't quite sure where that poem took me except to say I was thinking about time zones and suburban life here.