Miscarriage

[miyako73]

In the world disabled by dreams
Birthing impotence and despair
I exist among lies and shadows
In a vacuum nurturing no life.

No nightmare can awaken me
Or push me back to gestation
Of hysteria in my eggless womb
As barren as the cracked earth.

[dafydd manton]

A poignant piece, and an unusual subject. Beautifully crafted. The punctuation, or rather lack of it, is really effective. Thank you.

[Song of Mercy]

very dark. intersting dream like quality with the topic. Interesting in that you reference both dream and nightmare and make it clear nothing can be lost from the dark grip...not usually a dreamy topic....soothing..soothing...come see what I offer...come, I (whispering) will never lie..to you.

[Jerrybaldy]

As a man I have learnt I am useless in this situation.
well written
Jerry

[Delta40]

what a brutal truth and with what passion you have written it

[hillwalker]

An extremely brutal, self-punishing piece, particularly poignant because of the matter-of-fact language used.

V1 L4 leaves a desperately sad after-image.

[PrinceMyshkin]

In the world disabled by dreams
Birthing impotence and despair
I exist among lies and shadows
In a vacuum nurturing no life.

No nightmare can awaken me
Or push me back to gestation
Of hysteria in my eggless womb
As barren as the cracked earth.

This is an astonishing poem, the restraint highlights the horror of the circumstance you describe. You've been confident in your poetry since you first began posting here but I think you are getting more and more in command of the medium.

[Bar22do]

miyako, brutal, true and brought about with such an anger - falling into a tragic void. scarily efficient. thanks - Bar

[lallison]

you have captured the experience perfectly. Straight from the heart indeed - love the final pair of lines. Wonderful stuff. As soft and beautiful as ever. This is perfect and whole.